Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given table illustrates the proportion of people who visit Ashdown Museum before and after the period it was refurbished and the pie charts depict the result of satisfied visitors during the same periods.

Overall, it is clear that a large number of people visited the museum after refurbishment and the majority of visitors were very satisfied after the museum was refurbished.

During the year, the number of visitors who visit the Ashdown Museum was 74,000 before refurbishment, although 30% of visitors were satisfied before refurbishment. Furthermore, 15% of people were very satisfied with their visit to the museum and 5% did not show any response. 40% of people were dissatisfied and 10% were very dissatisfied with the museum before refurbishment.

During the same year, after the Ashdown Museum was refurbished 92,000 people visited the museum and 40% of people were satisfied with the visit to the museum. Moreover, the average of 35% of people were very satisfied and 5% did not show any response. Additionally,15% of visitors were dissatisfied and the proportion of 5% of people were very dissatisfied after the refurbishment of the museum

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have successfully identified the main features of the data, including the increase in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels. You covered both the table and the pie charts, making relevant comparisons between the two periods. However, the response is somewhat descriptive and lacks a more analytical approach to the data. For example, while you mention the percentages, you could have highlighted the significant drop in dissatisfaction (from 50% combined to 20% combined) more explicitly to show a clearer understanding of the trends. Overall, the task is addressed well, but the analysis could be more insightful to reach a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is logically organized, with a clear introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs focusing on the 'before' and 'after' periods. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'Moreover', and 'Additionally' to link your ideas. However, the flow is occasionally mechanical, and some transitions feel repetitive. The paragraphing is appropriate, but the internal cohesion within paragraphs could be improved by varying the sentence structures and using more sophisticated linking phrases to connect the data points more fluidly rather than listing them sequentially.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'refurbished', 'proportion', and 'satisfied'. However, the range is somewhat limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on basic phrasing such as 'number of people' and 'the museum'. To improve, you should incorporate more precise vocabulary related to data reporting, such as 'witnessed a rise', 'a significant shift', or 'the majority of respondents'. There are no major spelling errors, but the word choice lacks the sophistication required for a higher band score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is generally effective. There are some grammatical inaccuracies, such as 'the average of 35% of people were very satisfied' (which is slightly awkward phrasing) and 'the proportion of 5% of people were very dissatisfied'. Additionally, there are minor punctuation issues, such as missing spaces after commas (e.g., 'Additionally,15%'). While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and more varied sentence construction would be beneficial.

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