Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given table illustrates the proportion of people who visit Ashdown Museum before and after the period it was refurbished and the pie charts depict the result of satisfied visitors during the same periods.

Overall, it is clear that a large number of people visited the museum after refurbishment and the majority of visitors were very satisfied after the museum was refurbished.

During the year, the number of visitors who visited the Ashdown Museum was 74,000 before refurbishment, although 30% of visitors were satisfied before refurbishment. Furthermore, 15% of people were very satisfied with their visit to the museum and 5% did not show any response. 40% of people were dissatisfied and 10% were very dissatisfied with the museum before refurbishment.

During the same year, after the Ashdown Museum was refurbished 92,000 people visited the museum and 40% of people were satisfied with the visit to the museum. Moreover, the proportion of 35% of people were very satisfied and 5% did not show any response. Additionally, 15% of visitors were dissatisfied and the remaining 5% of people were very dissatisfied after the refurbishment of the museum.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response successfully covers all parts of the task by reporting the visitor numbers and the satisfaction survey data for both periods. You have identified the main features, such as the increase in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels. However, the analysis could be improved by making more direct comparisons between the two years rather than listing the data for each year separately. For instance, noting that the 'dissatisfied' category dropped significantly after the refurbishment would provide a more analytical approach. The overview is clear and effectively highlights the key trends, which is a positive aspect of your response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is logically organized, with a clear introduction, overview, and two body paragraphs. You use cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'Moreover', and 'Additionally' to link your ideas. However, some of these transitions feel slightly mechanical or repetitive. The progression of information is generally clear, but the flow between the visitor numbers and the survey data could be smoother. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the two time periods, which helps the reader follow the structure of your report.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'proportion', 'refurbished', and 'satisfied'. There is some repetition of phrases such as 'people were' and 'to the museum'. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more varied synonyms and precise collocations. For example, instead of repeating 'people', you could use 'visitors', 'attendees', or 'respondents'. The vocabulary used is accurate and does not impede communication, but it lacks the sophistication and flexibility required for a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While most of your sentences are clear, there are some minor grammatical issues, such as the phrasing 'the proportion of 35% of people were', which is slightly awkward. You have good control over basic grammar, and your errors do not impede communication. To improve, try to vary your sentence structure further by using more complex subordinating clauses or passive voice constructions to describe the data, which would demonstrate a wider grammatical range.

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