Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

the tabular data illustrate the difference about total number of visitors to Ashdown museum during the year before and after refurbishment also pie chart elaborate the information about results of surveys of visitor satisfaction year before and after refurbishment.

Overall, after the refurbishment number of tourist are increased also almost one third number of people are very satisfied as compared before renovation.

To begin with, at Ashdown museum 74000 visitors are visit during a year before refurbishment. During the survey of visitors satisfaction 15% of visitors are very satisfied by museum and one third percent of people are satisfied. However, almost half of portion of tourist are dissatisfied, which number is 40%. Also percentage of very dissatisfied and no response of visitor are very low where is it 10% and 5% continuously.

The year after refurbishment in the number of visitors are increased to 92000. As a result of surveys of visitors satisfaction, the percentage of very satisfied and satisfied is almost similar which number is 35% and 40%. Also reduce the number of dissatisfied which is 15 percentage. Moreover, very dissatisfied and no response have same number of percentage and number is 5%.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all parts of the task, including the visitor numbers and the satisfaction survey data for both years. You have successfully identified the main trends, such as the increase in total visitors and the shift in satisfaction levels. However, the overview is slightly weak; while it mentions the increase in visitors and satisfaction, it could be more precise. For instance, stating 'almost one third' is vague when the data shows a clear shift from 15% to 35%. To improve, ensure your overview highlights the most significant changes rather than just general trends, and avoid minor inaccuracies like 'one third percent' when referring to 33% or 35%.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs covering the two time periods. Cohesive devices are used, such as 'To begin with', 'However', and 'Moreover', which help the flow of information. However, some transitions are mechanical or slightly awkward, such as 'where is it 10% and 5% continuously'. The referencing is generally clear, but the connection between sentences could be smoother to avoid a list-like feel. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring they are used in a more natural, sophisticated way would help elevate the score.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to convey the necessary information about percentages and visitor numbers. You use some topic-specific terms like 'refurbishment', 'survey', and 'dissatisfied'. However, there are several instances of imprecise word choice and awkward phrasing, such as 'almost half of portion of tourist' and 'no response of visitor'. Additionally, there are some errors in word formation and collocation, such as 'continuously' used instead of 'respectively'. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensuring collocations are natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('number of tourist are increased'), incorrect tense usage ('visitors are visit'), and awkward sentence construction ('where is it 10% and 5% continuously'). Punctuation is generally functional, but the lack of articles and incorrect pluralization are consistent issues. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and ensuring that your verb tenses remain consistent throughout the report, especially when describing past data.

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