Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph below illustrates the survey of the people who visited Ashdown Museum.

During the year before refurbishment 74,000.

The visitors who were very satisfied were 15%.

And the visitors who were just satisfied was something around 30%.

The visitors who were dissatisfied were 40% which is the most largest percentage as shown in the survey.

Than we came to the number of visitors who were very dissatisfied were approximately about10%.

And if we see that number of people who had no response was around 5% as which was the lowest as shown Below

During the year after refurbishment 92.000

35% of the people were very satisfied 40% of the people were only satisfied

dissatisfied visitors were approximately around 15%. The visitors who were very dissatisfied is around 5%. The visitors who did not respond were 5% same as compare to very dissatisfied once.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement score. While you have identified the main features—the increase in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels—the report lacks a clear overview or summary of the trends. The data is presented in a fragmented, list-like manner rather than as a cohesive analytical report. To improve, you must synthesize the data by comparing the two periods directly rather than listing them separately. Additionally, ensure you provide a clear introductory statement and a concluding summary of the most significant changes observed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response lacks logical progression and effective paragraphing. The text is composed of short, disconnected sentences that do not flow well. There is a lack of cohesive devices (such as 'however', 'in contrast', or 'consequently') to link ideas or compare the two time periods. The structure is repetitive, with each sentence beginning in a similar way ('The visitors who...'). To improve, you should group related information into coherent paragraphs and use transition words to guide the reader through your analysis of the data.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on basic phrasing such as 'The visitors who were...' and 'the number of people who...'. There is little attempt to use a range of vocabulary to describe trends or data points. For instance, instead of 'most largest', which is grammatically incorrect, you should use 'highest' or 'greatest'. To reach a higher band, you need to incorporate more varied and precise vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuation', 'significant increase', or 'marginal decline'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'most largest', 'Than we came to', and 'same as compare to'. The sentence structures are very simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of decimals (e.g., '92.000' instead of '92,000'). To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors in subject-verb agreement and comparative structures.

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