Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-08-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The given table chart and pie chart depicts the number of tourists visited to Ashdown Museum during the year before and after it's refurbishment and the result of surveys of visitor's satisfaction.

Overall, it is crystal clear that, the number of visitors visited the Museum had been increased after it's refurbishment as compared to that of the former one. However, the proportions in the pie chart shows that the number of people who marked the place very satisfied had also increased in the year after its refurbishment as compared to that of the before one.

To start with, the data provided by the table explicit the total number of visitors to Ashdown Museum of both the years, before and after. During the year before its refurbishment it shows that 74,000 mankind visited the Museum whereas, the year after its refurbishment the number of visitors had been inclined to 92,000.

Additionally, the results of the surveys conducted at those two timeframes also depicts that the level of satisfaction had also improved. However, the year before, the proportion of individual with very satisfied was 16% which had increased to 35% by the year after its refurbishment. Proportion of individuals who said it was satisfied also goes up as it was 30% in the year before, reached to 40% afterwards. The level of dissatisfaction had been fallen down which was 40% before and after it reached to 15%. the mankind feels that it was very dissatisfactory have deducted by 5 times. Moreever, the number of no responses remain the same in both the years.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all parts of the task by identifying the main trends in both the table and the pie charts. You successfully highlighted the increase in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels. However, the analysis is somewhat descriptive rather than analytical. For instance, you list the percentages without fully synthesising the data or making deeper comparisons. To reach a higher band, ensure you group information more logically and focus on the most significant changes rather than listing every data point. The overview is present but could be more concise to better highlight the 'main features' as requested.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The essay is logically organised into paragraphs, with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. You use some cohesive devices like 'To start with', 'Additionally', and 'However' to link ideas. However, some transitions feel mechanical or slightly repetitive. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as 'that of the before one', which is grammatically awkward and hinders the flow. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer back to their antecedents would enhance the overall cohesion of the response.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the main points, such as 'refurbishment', 'proportions', and 'inclined'. However, there are several instances of inappropriate word choice and non-standard collocations. For example, using 'mankind' to refer to visitors is incorrect in this context, and 'explicit' is used as a verb where an adjective or a different verb was needed. There are also errors in word formation, such as 'dissatisfactory' instead of 'dissatisfied'. To improve, focus on using vocabulary that is precise and appropriate for a formal report.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with verb tenses and articles. For example, 'the number of visitors visited' is incorrect; it should be 'the number of visitors who visited'. You also have issues with subject-verb agreement and unnecessary articles, such as 'the table chart'. The use of 'had been inclined' is an incorrect passive construction for this context. A greater focus on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy would significantly improve your score.

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