Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This chart display us about survey of the visitor. it shows total number for them. they took survey before development and after they redevelop the entire museum then they took survey from them. here we can see through chart which type of reviews were received form locals.

first they created a box in that they tally number of tourist who went there to show the museum. first they ask before refurbishment at that time 74,000 people were visited this place and after then redevelopment number of tourist was increased by 18,000.

now they show us the result of survey. this show in two chart and it display different reaction that received from local people. at first people were very satisfied with this by 15% but after that this number change with 35%. then people who were satisfied with this was 30% but after that it also increase and reached at 40%. at first people were so dissatisfied with this place but now not that much people were dissatisfied with this project. number of very dissatisfied also decreased and 5%. one result remained same that was no response.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses the task by summarizing the visitor numbers and survey results. However, the analysis is quite superficial. While you correctly identify the increase in visitor numbers (74,000 to 92,000), the description of the survey data is repetitive and lacks precision. For instance, you mention 'very satisfied' and 'satisfied' categories but fail to clearly contrast the 'dissatisfied' and 'very dissatisfied' figures, which show a significant downward trend. To improve, ensure you highlight the most significant trends and make clear comparisons between the two periods rather than just listing individual data points.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the flow between ideas is mechanical and lacks sophisticated cohesive devices. The use of transitions like 'first' and 'now' is repetitive and simplistic. Furthermore, the referencing is sometimes unclear; for example, 'this show in two chart' does not clearly link back to the specific data being discussed. Paragraphing is present, but the internal structure of the paragraphs lacks logical progression, making the text feel like a list of observations rather than a cohesive report.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and often imprecise. You rely on basic verbs like 'show', 'create', and 'increase'. There are also several errors in word choice and form, such as 'redevelop the entire museum then they took survey from them' and 'not that much people'. The lack of variety in reporting verbs and descriptive adjectives hinders the ability to convey the data with precision. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more academic vocabulary related to data analysis, such as 'fluctuated', 'experienced a rise', or 'remained stable'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('This chart display us'), article usage ('the survey of the visitor'), and sentence structure (run-on sentences and fragments). The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. Complex structures are largely absent or attempted with significant errors. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct tense usage and punctuation, before attempting more complex grammatical forms.

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