Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The table depicts the total number of tourists to Ashdown cultural centre over the year period before renovation. The pie charts compares achievement of visitor's fulfilment.
overall, according to table after the redevelopment of exhibition centre the number of traveller will be increased, while after the renovation the individuals who satisfied is also higher.
According to table, before the remodelling of cultural centre stood at 74,000 number tourism . The sudden growth observed after the reconstruction of historical centre, that was 92,000.
Turning to pie-charts , in year before refurbishment, with only 5 visitors, no response was least result. The figure was remain same after the reconstruction of museum. The dissatisfied individuals noticed before development by 40. this figure considerably low after the construction. Satisfied individuals noted at 30 before the period. then noticed high at 40. very-satisfied and very dis-satisfied people was observe 25 collectively. after the remodelling of cultural centre that was 35 and 5 respectively.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the table and pie charts, but the analysis is often unclear or inaccurate. For example, the student states 'no response was least result' with '5 visitors', but the chart labels are percentages, not visitor numbers. The comparison of the 'very-satisfied' and 'very dissatisfied' categories is confusingly phrased, making it difficult to follow the data trends. While the overall trend of increased visitor numbers is identified, the specific data points are often mislabeled or misinterpreted, which prevents a clear, accurate summary of the information provided in the visual aids.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, but the logical progression is weak. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'According to table' and 'Turning to pie-charts', which are used repetitively. Referencing is frequently unclear; for instance, the transition between the table data and the pie chart data lacks a smooth connection. The internal structure of the sentences is often disjointed, making the flow of information feel fragmented rather than cohesive. The paragraphing is present but does not effectively group related ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and often inappropriate for an academic report. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'visitor's fulfilment' instead of 'visitor satisfaction' and 'redevelopment of exhibition centre' when the prompt refers to a museum. The student struggles with basic terminology, often using 'number' or 'figure' in ways that do not accurately describe the data. Some terms are used incorrectly, such as 'reconstruction' and 'remodelling' used interchangeably without precision. These errors occasionally impede the reader's understanding of the data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('the pie charts compares'), article usage ('according to table'), and tense consistency ('the number of traveller will be increased'). Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often result in errors, such as 'the individuals who satisfied is also higher'. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of hyphens and commas. While the meaning is generally discernible, the high frequency of errors is a significant distraction.
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