Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

A museum is place which introduce the history of the country ,it tell us that how they live what they wear, what they do for entertainment , what was their food culture , what was their currency , who they worship . Day by day increasing of tourism all over the world . Here the pie charts of Ashdown museum shows the number of visitor in the Ashdown museum ,showing the reports of before refurbished and after refurbished .During the year before refurbishment the total number of visitors was 74000 and during the year after refurbishment was 92000 . The results of surveys of visitor satisfaction was incredibly increased after the year of refurbishment as compare to results of before the year of refurbishment . The rate of satisfaction increased 15% to 35% . sometime Little bit changes bring large effect in the work and it is the result after the year of refurbishment

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to adequately address the task requirements. While it mentions the visitor numbers, it lacks a clear overview of the main trends and fails to report on the specific categories of satisfaction shown in the charts. The introduction is irrelevant, focusing on the general purpose of museums rather than the data provided. The analysis is superficial, merely stating the total numbers and a single satisfaction percentage without comparing the specific categories (e.g., 'very satisfied', 'satisfied', 'dissatisfied') as required by the prompt. The response lacks the necessary detail to provide a comprehensive summary of the visual information.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The essay lacks logical organization and paragraphing. It is written as a single, disjointed block of text. There is no clear progression of ideas; the transition from the general introduction to the data description is abrupt. Cohesive devices are largely absent or misused, such as the repetitive use of 'during the year' and the lack of linking words to connect the data points. The referencing is also unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the relationship between the figures and the satisfaction levels.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. The student relies on basic terms like 'number of visitor' and 'results'. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'before refurbished' instead of 'before the refurbishment' and 'incredibly increased' which is not an appropriate collocation for statistical data. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to demonstrate the precision required for an Academic Task 1 response, and the errors occasionally make the meaning slightly unclear.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede readability. There are significant issues with subject-verb agreement ('it tell us', 'charts... shows'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or fragmented, such as the opening list of questions. Complex structures are attempted but are consistently inaccurate, leading to a lack of control over basic grammar. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with spaces missing before commas and periods throughout the text.

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