Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The chart demonstrate the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum before and after the renovation. This chart disclose the satisfaction level of visitors with their visit, during the same two periods. This essay will elaborate that how visitors are satisfied , during the same two periods.
The total number of visitors before redecoration of museum was 74,000. Whereas, after renovation the amount of guests increased to 92,000.
The number of dissatisfied citizens were higher than the number of satisfied ones before redecoration. Only 15 of them were very satisfied and only 10 were satisfied. Moreover, the dissatisfied were in majority which was the amount of 40, and the amount of very dissatisfied citizens were 10. There was no response from 5 people.
On the other hand, the results after refurbishment were quiet opposite. The amount of satisfied people increased to 35, and the number of very satisfied visitors reached the highest with 40 people. In contrast the level of dissatisfied and very dissatisfied people decreased to 15 and 5. However people with no response remain same.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the data, including the visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical. You have correctly identified the increase in visitor numbers and the reversal in satisfaction trends. To reach a higher band, ensure you clearly distinguish between the total visitor numbers (in thousands) and the survey percentages/proportions. Your description of the survey data as 'amount of 40' is slightly inaccurate as these represent percentages or raw survey counts rather than total visitor volume. The overview is also a bit repetitive; ensure the summary highlights the most significant trends rather than just listing data points.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is logically organized into paragraphs, with an introduction, a section for visitor numbers, and a section for survey results. You use some cohesive devices like 'Whereas', 'Moreover', and 'On the other hand' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by repetitive sentence structures and some awkward phrasing, such as 'This essay will elaborate that how visitors are satisfied'. The referencing is generally clear, but the transition between the visitor numbers and the survey data could be smoother to improve the overall progression of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You have a sufficient range of vocabulary to convey the main points, such as 'renovation', 'refurbishment', and 'dissatisfied'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. For example, 'redecoration' is not the most precise term for a museum renovation, and 'quiet opposite' should be 'quite opposite'. Additionally, using 'amount' for countable survey respondents is incorrect; 'number' or 'proportion' would be more appropriate. To improve, focus on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensuring that your word choices are contextually accurate for describing statistical data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement issues ('The chart demonstrate', 'The number of dissatisfied citizens were') and incorrect word order ('elaborate that how visitors are satisfied'). While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding the main points, they occur frequently enough to impact the overall fluency. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and ensure that complex sentence structures are constructed accurately, particularly when reporting data.
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