Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The table illustrates the visitor numbers before and after the refurbishment of Ashdown museum, while the pie chart compare visitors satisfaction levels across the same period.
According to the table and the pie chart below it seems that the number of satisfied visitors increased after the refurbishment of the Ashdown museum and the amount of dissatisfied vistors dropped.
Although the number of visitors rose from 75,000 to 92,000 owing to the refurbishment of the Ashdown museum. Which means people are amazed by the renovation and the construction of the museum as a result the number of visitors increased by 75,000 to 92,000.
The number of highly satisfied tourists increased by 15 to 35 after the refurbishment and the dissatisfied people decreased by 40 to 15 which is a huge difference, but the 5% of the no response people remain same in both cases. Also the number of
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you have identified the main features of the table and charts, the analysis is incomplete and ends abruptly mid-sentence. You have attempted to compare the data, but the explanation of the visitor numbers is repetitive and lacks clarity. Specifically, you mention the increase from 75,000 to 92,000 twice in the same paragraph. To improve, ensure you provide a complete overview and avoid redundant phrasing. You must also ensure that all parts of the prompt are fully addressed and that the response is of sufficient length to allow for a full development of the data provided.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into short paragraphs, but the flow is interrupted by the incomplete nature of the final paragraph. The use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'the number of'. The logical progression is hindered by the abrupt ending, which leaves the reader without a clear conclusion or a fully developed final point. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'in contrast', 'consequently') to connect your ideas more fluidly. Ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus and that the essay reaches a natural conclusion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range required for a higher band. You rely on basic terms like 'increased' and 'decreased' repeatedly. There are also some awkward phrasings, such as 'no response people', which should be 'visitors who gave no response'. To improve, try to incorporate more sophisticated synonyms and collocations related to data description, such as 'witnessed a significant rise' or 'experienced a decline'. Expanding your range of vocabulary will help you describe the trends more effectively and professionally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains several grammatical errors that affect the clarity of your writing. For instance, 'the pie chart compare' should be 'the pie chart compares' (subject-verb agreement). You also have sentence fragments, such as 'Which means people are amazed...', which should be connected to the previous sentence. The structure is largely simple, with limited attempts at complex sentences. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and ensure that every sentence is complete. Practice combining simple sentences into complex ones using relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions to demonstrate a wider range of grammatical control.
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