Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The table illustrates the number of visitor to Ashdown Museum during and after the year of refurbished while the Pie chart depicts the percentage of satisfied visitor.
Overall, the number of visitor increase significantly, while the percentage of satisfied and very satisfied increased after the renovation of museum.
firstly, the number of visitor to museum before renovation were 74000 after that it increased and reach 92000.Furthermore the number of visitors which were very satisfied were only 15% while the satisfied were double than the satisfied visitors. Moreover whose visitor which were dissatisfied were accounted 40%.In addition to this visitor who were very dissatisfied were 10% and tourists who do response were 5%.
On the other hand the response of visitor after renovation changed such as the percentage of very satisfied tourist were accounted 35% and the percentage of satisfaction of explorer were increased to 40% while the number of visitor response change after redevelop the percentage had reduced to 15%. in contrast the percentage of dissatisfaction and no response visitor were same only 5% contributed.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the data, including the increase in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels. However, the analysis is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear, analytical overview. While the key figures are mentioned, the comparison between the two periods is not fully developed. For instance, the description of the pie charts is slightly confusing, particularly the phrase 'satisfied were double than the satisfied visitors,' which is unclear. The response addresses the prompt but lacks the depth required for a higher band, as some data points are presented as a list rather than a cohesive summary.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate. Phrases like 'In addition to this visitor who were' and 'On the other hand the response of visitor' feel forced. The progression of ideas is sometimes hindered by awkward phrasing and repetitive sentence structures. While the overall arrangement is coherent enough to follow, the lack of sophisticated linking words and the occasional misuse of referencing (e.g., 'whose visitor which were') prevent a higher score.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The range of vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks precision. There are several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'tourists who do response' instead of 'respondents' or 'no response,' and 'redevelop' used as a noun. The student relies on basic descriptors like 'increased' and 'changed' repeatedly. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of variety and the presence of errors in word formation (e.g., 'refurbished' used as a noun) limit the score. To improve, the student should focus on using more precise terminology related to data reporting.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the number of visitor increase'), incorrect pluralisation (e.g., 'percentage of satisfied visitor'), and awkward prepositional usage. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing commas and run-on sentences. While the meaning is usually understandable, the frequency of these errors prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would be beneficial.
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