Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The table illustrate that the numbers of visitors to the Ashdown museum refurbished and survey shows the individuals that have been some of good experience and some of normal and some are do not respond.
The total number of individuals going to museum before refurbish and after some year they have changing inside the museum people give some review about the museum.
Total amount of the people before the refurbish inside the museum is 74000 and during tis year after refurbish individuals amount is 92000, and we will discuss in this paragraph. Firstly, before the refurbishment some individuals 15% very satisfied, in other after refurbished changing and respond 35%, secondly, satisfied before the changing in the museum 30% and other side, after some year 5% satisfied, dissatisfied before give changing is 40% and after changing in the museum some year is below 15%.
Furthermore, before changing inside the museum very dissatisfied is 10% or after changing some year it is highly 40%, in last some individuals do not respond in this survey before the refurbished is 5% and after some year they will change the museum the rating of not respond is same 5%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the data, including the total visitor numbers and the satisfaction survey percentages. However, the presentation is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear overview or summary of the trends. The description of the data is often repetitive, and the comparison between the two periods is hindered by awkward phrasing, such as 'before the changing in the museum'. While the key data points are included, the lack of a cohesive summary and the informal, fragmented style prevent a higher score. To improve, ensure you provide a clear introductory overview of the main trends before detailing specific figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the logical flow is weak. The use of cohesive devices is limited and often misused, such as 'in other after refurbished' or 'in last some individuals'. The progression of ideas is disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the two time periods. Referencing is often unclear, and the transition between the table data and the survey data is abrupt. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that connects logically to the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, relying heavily on the words provided in the prompt. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'individuals amount' instead of 'number of visitors' and 'give changing' instead of 'refurbishment'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to express the data with precision. To improve, focus on learning topic-specific vocabulary related to data description, such as 'increased significantly', 'remained stable', or 'a notable shift in opinion', and practice using these in context to avoid repetitive phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('The table illustrate'), article usage, and sentence structure. Many sentences are fragmented or run-on, which obscures the intended meaning. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the control over basic grammar is inconsistent. For example, 'after some year they will change the museum' is grammatically incorrect and confusing. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions and articles, before attempting more complex structures.
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