Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
introduction:
The table is showing the details about peoples visit the mesuem before and after refurbishment.On the other hand chart is listed with satisfaction level of people during the same period.
By having a Glance on table 74000 peoples were visited the museum before refurbished and after they were about 92000 visitors.
The pie chart is showing difference between satisfation level before and after renovation of the museumThe first pie chart is showing that before refurbishment only 15% was very satisfied 30% was only satisfied.40% is with dissatisfied which is a large number and 10 % was very disappoined and 5% had no response.On the other hand the pie chat is illustrated with after the process of refurbishment 35% peoples were very satisfied and 40% were only satisfied which is the much higher than last year.only 15 % is with dissatisfied and 5% with very dissatisfied which is very low as compare to last year.at last 5% were had no review which does not matter.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the table and pie charts, identifying the increase in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels. However, the report lacks a clear overview or summary statement that synthesizes the trends. The data reporting is somewhat mechanical, listing percentages without sufficient comparative analysis. For instance, while you mention the increase in 'very satisfied' visitors, you could have more effectively contrasted the significant drop in 'dissatisfied' visitors. The response addresses the task requirements but lacks the analytical depth required for a higher band score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hampered by repetitive sentence structures and a lack of cohesive devices. Transitions between the table data and the pie chart data are abrupt. Phrases like 'On the other hand' are used, but the connection between ideas is often weak. The paragraphing is present but does not effectively group related information, leading to a disjointed reading experience. To improve, use a wider variety of linking words such as 'consequently', 'in contrast', or 'furthermore' to guide the reader through the data.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic descriptors like 'very satisfied' and 'only satisfied'. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'peoples were visited' and 'very disappoined'. The use of 'no review' is imprecise for describing survey data. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise vocabulary related to data trends, such as 'a significant rise', 'a marked improvement', or 'a substantial decline', and ensure accurate word forms are used consistently.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('peoples were visited', 'chart is listed'), incorrect tense usage ('The table is showing'), and missing articles. Sentence structures are predominantly simple or contain errors when attempting more complex constructions. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several run-on sentences and missing spaces after periods. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for subject-verb agreement would significantly improve the accuracy of your writing.
See this exact question answered at other band scores — the same prompt compared across bands.
Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.