Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The table provide the data on the total amount of visitors to Ashdown Museum before and after refurbishment.While,pie illustrates the proportion of Results of surveys of visitors satisfaction.
Overall,the total number of visitors are visiting Ashdown Museum in after refurbishment increase proportion compared to before refurbishment.Results of surveys people are mostly like to dissatisfied in before refurbishment and most of the people are satisfied in after refurbishment . while no response to people are less percentage.
Total number of visitors are visiting museum before refurbishment as 74,000 slightly increased to after refurbishment in 92,000.
In contract, people are dissatisfied in before refurbishment in 40% but after refurbishment more drops to visiting museum in 15%.Well satisfied to visit in 30% to slightly increase in 40% after refurbishment.Very satisfied in people after refurbishment in 35% compare to before refurbishment just 15%.Very few people are no response in 5% to both before and after refurbishment.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
You have identified the main trends, such as the increase in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels. However, the response lacks a clear overview and the data reporting is somewhat mechanical. While you mention the increase from 74,000 to 92,000, the description of the survey results is confusingly phrased, particularly the sentence 'after refurbishment more drops to visiting museum in 15%'. To improve, ensure you clearly distinguish between the two data sets (table and pie charts) and provide a more cohesive summary of the key changes rather than just listing figures.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the logical flow is hindered by awkward phrasing and a lack of effective cohesive devices. Transitions like 'In contract' (presumably meant to be 'In contrast') are used incorrectly. The referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the two time periods. To improve, use a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'consequently', 'whereas', 'in comparison') and ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through the data.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'increase', 'people', and 'satisfied'. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'mostly like to dissatisfied' and 'no response to people'. These errors occasionally impede the clarity of your message. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more precise vocabulary related to data description, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuation', 'significant', or 'marginal', and focus on using these words in their correct collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect readability. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The table provide', 'number of visitors are visiting'), incorrect preposition usage, and awkward sentence structures. You rely almost exclusively on simple sentences, which limits your ability to express complex comparisons. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, specifically subject-verb agreement and the correct use of articles. Additionally, try to incorporate more complex sentence structures, such as using relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions, to improve the flow and sophistication of your writing.
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