Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Both the grapes shows that before and after the year of refurbishment. Before the refurbishment only 5%are satisfied, But they are not good for this purpose. In this graph generally 40% vistiors are dissatisfied and 10% are very dissatisfied, 15% are very satisfied and 5% are not responsed. After the year of refurbishment only 40% are satisfied, 35% are very satisfied and 15% are dissatisfied. According to the graph the refurbishment of the visitors berfore and after the year 40% are dissatisfied and 40% are satisfied. There was a great gasp between the satisfiation of the visitor. During the year then

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. Furthermore, the content is incomplete; it fails to mention the visitor numbers (the table data) and focuses only on the satisfaction percentages. The summary is fragmented, and the final sentence is incomplete, meaning the task is not fully addressed. To improve, you must describe all data sets provided (both the table and the charts) and ensure you provide a clear overview of the main trends rather than just listing isolated figures. The response is too brief to demonstrate the ability to select and report main features effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The response lacks a logical structure. There is no clear introduction, body, or conclusion. The use of cohesive devices is minimal and often misused, such as the abrupt transition 'In this graph generally'. The text is essentially a list of statistics rather than a coherent summary. Paragraphing is absent, which makes the information difficult to follow. To improve, you should group related information together—for example, discussing visitor numbers in one paragraph and satisfaction levels in another—and use linking words like 'whereas', 'in contrast', or 'subsequently' to connect your ideas.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'good' and 'satisfied', and there are errors in word choice, such as 'not responsed' instead of 'did not respond' or 'no response'. The phrase 'great gasp' is likely a misuse of 'gap'. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary to describe trends, such as 'significant increase', 'dramatic decline', or 'proportion'. You should also focus on using more precise terminology related to data analysis, such as 'survey participants' or 'the majority of respondents'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The grammar is frequently inaccurate, which occasionally impedes communication. There are errors in subject-verb agreement ('Both the grapes shows') and sentence structure (the final sentence is a fragment). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement. Once you are comfortable with simple sentences, try to incorporate complex structures using relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions to show relationships between the data points.

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