Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
the chart illustrates the comparison of both charts number of visitor to Ashdown Museum during the year before refurbishment or during the year after refurbishment.
overall, the visitor to Ashdown Museum during before the year before refurbishment is 74,000 the 40% of visitor are dissatisfied 15% of visitor only very satisfied 30% visitor are satisfied in that time with Ashdown Museum.
the result of surveys of visitor satisfaction after refurbishment is change in some factor 35% of visitor are now very satisfied 40% of visitor are satisfied is show some positive result 5% of visitor show no response it remains constant in both scenario.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you have identified some key data points, such as the total visitor numbers and satisfaction percentages, the analysis is incomplete. You have not fully compared the two periods or highlighted the most significant trends effectively. The summary lacks a clear overview of the main features, and the under-length nature of the response means that the task is only partially addressed. To improve, ensure you provide a comprehensive summary that covers all data points and makes clear comparisons between the 'before' and 'after' periods.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is very short and lacks a clear paragraph structure. While there is a basic attempt to group information, the lack of cohesive devices makes the text feel disjointed. Sentences are presented as a list of facts rather than a cohesive report. To improve, use linking words such as 'however', 'in contrast', or 'consequently' to connect your ideas. Additionally, ensure you use clear paragraphing to separate your introduction, overview, and body paragraphs, which will help the reader follow your argument more logically.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'visitor', 'satisfied', and 'number'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'is change in some factor' and 'is show some positive result', which are grammatically and lexically awkward. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use a wider range of vocabulary, including synonyms and more precise terms to describe data trends, such as 'fluctuated', 'increased significantly', or 'remained stable'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'the visitor... is 74,000'), missing articles, and incorrect tense usage. The sentence structures are mostly simple, with little attempt at complex sentences. Punctuation is also inconsistent, which makes the text difficult to read. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, and using articles correctly. Practicing the use of complex structures, such as relative clauses or subordinating conjunctions, will also help improve your range.
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