Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given data provides the results of the
survey for the Ashdown Museum before and
after the refurbishment's effect on the visitors
The satisfaction is given in the percentage.
Firstly, the number of tourists shows a
significant rise after the renovation of the
Museum. Secondly, the proportion of highly
satisfied people rise 5% more than its
double amount that is 35%. Thirdly, there is
a 10% increase in normal satisfaction
level.
Furthermore, the dissatisfaction of people reduced upto one-fourth percentage of the total. Also, the no-response category remains unchanged whether the amount of very satisfied
individuals tend to reduced by 5%.
In overall, the satisfaction and the amount of
visitors arise after the refurbishment but the percentage of having no response remain same during both periods.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the task achievement score. While you have identified some main features, such as the increase in visitor numbers and changes in satisfaction levels, the analysis is superficial. You have not provided specific data points from the table or charts to support your claims, making the report vague. For instance, stating 'a significant rise' without mentioning the actual figures (74,000 to 92,000) prevents the reader from understanding the scale of change. To improve, ensure you include specific data and provide a more comprehensive overview of all trends presented in the visual data.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organised into short paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive, such as the use of 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'Thirdly'. The logical progression is hindered by the lack of detailed data, making the transition between points feel abrupt. Referencing is generally clear, but the overall flow is limited by the brevity of the response. To improve, try to vary your linking words and ensure that each paragraph develops a clear, cohesive idea supported by the provided evidence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task but lacks the precision and range expected at higher bands. You rely on basic terms like 'rise', 'amount', and 'reduced'. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'the dissatisfaction of people reduced' and 'the amount of very satisfied individuals tend to reduced'. These errors do not impede communication, but they demonstrate a limited control over academic vocabulary. To improve, focus on using more precise reporting verbs and nouns, such as 'fluctuated', 'proportion', 'declined', or 'experienced a surge'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures. However, there are several grammatical inaccuracies that affect the quality of the writing. For example, 'the refurbishment's effect on the visitors' is slightly awkward, and 'the amount of very satisfied individuals tend to reduced' contains a subject-verb agreement error and an incorrect verb form. Punctuation is generally functional, but the sentence structure is often simplistic. To improve, work on using a wider variety of complex sentence structures and ensure subject-verb agreement is consistent throughout your writing.
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