Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The provided two charts illustrate the results of visitors satisfaction after the surveys during the year before refurbishment and the after.
Overall,it was greatest development after refurbishment in the case of customer satisfaction.But at the same time it was just low before refurbishment.
Before refurbishment,it was less than one fifth on very satisfied customers and it significantly changed after refurbishment crossing approximately more than one third.Moreover it was more than a quarter before modifications but it boomed more than before that.However it was very high on dissatisfied customers before refurbishment but interestingly it was surprised to be low on the number of dissatisfied customers after refurbishment reducing
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully address the task. While you have identified some main features, the analysis is incomplete and lacks the necessary detail to provide a comprehensive summary. You have omitted the data regarding the total number of visitors, which is a key component of the table provided. Furthermore, the description of the survey results is vague and lacks precise referencing to the data points. To improve, ensure you cover all parts of the prompt, including the table and the charts, and provide a more detailed comparison of the figures to meet the length requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is very short, making it difficult to establish a clear logical progression. While there is a basic attempt at an introduction and a summary, the lack of paragraphing and the abrupt ending hinder the flow of information. Cohesive devices are used sparingly and sometimes inaccurately, such as the repetitive use of 'before refurbishment' and 'after refurbishment'. To improve, use a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'in contrast', 'consequently', 'furthermore') to connect your ideas more fluidly and ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. Phrases like 'greatest development', 'significantly changed', and 'very high' are used, but they lack the precision required for a high-scoring IELTS response. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'it was surprised to be low', which is grammatically and lexically incorrect. To improve, try to incorporate more varied and precise vocabulary related to data description, such as 'substantial increase', 'marginal decline', or 'proportion of visitors'. Expanding your range of synonyms will help you avoid repeating the same phrases throughout your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. For example, 'it was greatest development' is missing an article, and 'it was less than one fifth on very satisfied customers' uses the wrong preposition. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement and correct article usage. Practice using complex sentences with subordinating conjunctions (e.g., 'although', 'while') to demonstrate a wider range of grammatical control.
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