Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The table and pie charts illustrates the total number of visitors to Ashdown Museum in the year before and the year after its refurbishment, as well as the results of survey concerning visitors satisfaction during these two period.
Overall, the number of visitors increased after refurbishment. Moreover, visitor satisfaction improved significantly, while dissatisfaction decreased.
In the terms of satisfaction, 40% of visitors were dissatisfied before the refurbishment, while 30% were satisfied and 15% was very satisfied. Furthermore, the remaining visitors were either very dissatisfied give no response.
On the other hand, after the refurbishment the percentage of very satisfied increase up 15% to 35% respectively. In addition, the ratio of very dissatisfied change 30% to 40% in after the year. However, there is a downfall in dissatisfied proportion decrease almost 25% from 40% to 15% while, very dissatisfied visitors decrease from 10% to 5% and no response still same.
To be summarise, the refurbishment had a positive effect on both visitors numbers and satisfaction.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the table and charts, providing a clear overview and supporting details. However, the analysis of the data contains significant inaccuracies. For example, you state that the ratio of 'very dissatisfied' changed from 30% to 40%, which contradicts the provided data. Additionally, the description of the 'dissatisfied' category is confusing and mathematically inconsistent. While you have identified the main trends, the lack of precision in reporting the figures prevents a higher score. To improve, ensure that your data points are accurately transcribed and that comparisons are logically sound.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a summary. Cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'In terms of', and 'On the other hand' are used to link ideas. However, the flow within the second body paragraph is somewhat disjointed due to the confusing presentation of the data. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and some transitions feel mechanical. To reach a higher band, focus on ensuring that each sentence follows logically from the previous one and that the progression of information is smooth and easy to follow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'refurbishment', 'satisfaction', and 'proportion'. However, there are several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'give no response' instead of 'gave no response' and 'the ratio... change' instead of 'changed'. Some phrasing is repetitive, and the lack of precision in describing the data trends limits the score. To improve, work on using more precise academic vocabulary and ensure that your word forms are grammatically correct in context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('The table and pie charts illustrates'), incorrect verb tenses ('the percentage... increase'), and missing prepositions or articles. While the meaning is generally understandable, these errors are persistent throughout the text. To improve, pay closer attention to subject-verb agreement and verb tense consistency, especially when describing past events and comparing data sets.
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