Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

The table shows the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished, The pie chart shows their satisfaction level during the same two period.

Overall, it is clear that the number of visitors increased after refurbishment. Also, the proportion of people with high satisfaction rose as compared to before renovation.

Before refurbishment, the number of visitors were 74,000. Whereas, 30% of people are satisfied and 40% of visitors are dissatisfied which was the largest group. 15% of people are very satisfied and 10% are very dissatisfied. Meanwhile, 5% gave no response.

After refurbishment, the number of visitors increased to 92,000. The percentage of very satisfied visitors increase from 15% to 35%, while satisfied visitors rose from 30% to 40%. In contrast, dissatisfied visitors fell from 40% to 15% and very dissatisfied decreased from 10% to 5%, Whereas, level of people with no response remain same.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have successfully identified the main features of the data, including the increase in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels. You provided a clear overview and supported your points with specific data from the table and charts. However, to reach a higher band, ensure that all comparisons are fully developed. For instance, while you noted the increase in visitor numbers, you could have explicitly linked the rise in satisfaction to the refurbishment as a key trend. The response covers all parts of the task well, providing a clear summary of the provided information.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The response is logically organized, with a clear introduction, overview, and body paragraphs that separate the 'before' and 'after' periods. You used some cohesive devices such as 'Whereas', 'In contrast', and 'Meanwhile' to link ideas. However, the flow is occasionally interrupted by minor punctuation errors, such as the comma splice in the first paragraph ('...refurbished, The pie chart...'). Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring consistent paragraph structure will help the progression of ideas feel more natural and sophisticated.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have an adequate range of vocabulary to convey the information clearly, using terms like 'proportion', 'refurbished', and 'satisfaction level'. There are some minor errors in word choice and form, such as 'level of people' instead of 'proportion of visitors' and 'remain same' instead of 'remained the same'. To improve, try to incorporate more precise academic collocations and ensure consistent verb tense usage when describing data. The vocabulary is sufficient for the task but lacks the flexibility and precision required for higher bands.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical inaccuracies. For example, 'the number of visitors were' should be 'was', and 'the percentage of very satisfied visitors increase' should be 'increased' to maintain past tense consistency. Additionally, there are issues with article usage and subject-verb agreement. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on proofreading for tense consistency and subject-verb agreement will significantly improve your accuracy.

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