Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The given table illustrates the number of tourists to Ashdown museum in period of before refurbishment and after the

year of renovation.While,pie charts compare the result of survey where satisfaction level of tourists where distributed in proportions in the same year.

Overall,it is crystal clear that number of visitor is significantly increased after renovation in museum.Meanwhile,in pie charts before refurbishment condition was highly dissatisfied by the visitor but after that satisfaction level is increasing in a good proportion.

In terms of population,before refurbishment the total number of visitors was 74,000 which is inclined by 18,000 after repair of museum.Besides this,before repairing of museum ,the satisfaction level was only 45percentage which distributes in more satisfied and satisfied condition.Whereas,the dissatisfaction level was 40percent and highly dissatisfied with the condition was 10%.

In terms of visitors satisfaction,5percent visitors not provided any responses in both condition.After renovation,the gratified condition improved towards the museum.Now ,the percentage comes to 35% in highly satisfy area.In satifaction section it approach to 40percent.While,total 20percent Dissatisfaction occurs in newly transformed museum.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers all parts of the task by summarizing the visitor numbers and satisfaction levels. You successfully identified the main trends, such as the increase in visitor numbers and the shift toward higher satisfaction post-renovation. However, the reporting of data is sometimes imprecise; for example, stating '45percentage which distributes in more satisfied and satisfied condition' is vague. To reach a higher band, ensure that all data points are clearly linked to their specific categories and avoid generalizations. The overview is present but could be more clearly separated from the body paragraphs to highlight the main trends more effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organized into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear attempt to use cohesive devices like 'In terms of', 'Whereas', and 'Meanwhile'. However, the flow is occasionally hindered by mechanical or awkward phrasing, such as 'While,pie charts compare...' and 'After renovation,the gratified condition improved towards the museum.' The use of punctuation is inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and periods throughout the text. While the progression of ideas is generally logical, the lack of sophisticated linking words and the repetitive sentence structures make the cohesion feel somewhat mechanical rather than fluid.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

You have an adequate range of vocabulary to convey the main points, using terms like 'refurbishment', 'renovation', and 'satisfaction level'. However, there are several instances of word-choice errors and awkward collocations, such as 'gratified condition', 'inclined by 18,000' (instead of 'increased by'), and 'highly satisfy area'. These errors do not impede communication, but they demonstrate a limited control over precise academic vocabulary. To improve, focus on using collocations correctly and expanding your range of reporting verbs and adjectives to describe data trends more naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

The response uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. Issues include missing articles ('to Ashdown museum'), incorrect verb forms ('visitors not provided'), and punctuation errors (missing spaces after punctuation). While you attempt complex sentences, they are often marred by errors that occasionally distract the reader. The control over basic grammar is inconsistent, and the lack of attention to sentence-level mechanics prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. Focusing on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement and article usage would significantly improve the clarity of your writing.

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