Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The pie chart shows that the number of the visitors to visiting the Ashdown museum before the year that the surveys of visitors satisfaction. The charts show the result of visitor how satisfied they were with their visit during the same two period.
The pie chart show that the result of survey of visitor before the year refurbishment the visitor is about 74000. Before the year refurbishment no response was least down then all the ratio was 5% then satisfied was high rised then very satisfied, very dissatisfied and response was near about 30% in the year before refurbishment and was the dissatisfied was highly increased the percentage was 40%. Year after refurbishment the very dissatisfied was decreased to the other the percentage was 5% and the very satisfied increased in the year after was the ratio 30% then other satisfied was highly increased then the other the percentage was near about 40%. Total number of visitors during the year before refurbishment was 74000 and other during the year after refurbishment the number of visitors was 92000.
In the conclusion that the number of visitors before the year was less then after year refurbishment some of the satisfied and some of the dissatisfied visiting the Ashdown museum.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task by reporting on visitor numbers and satisfaction levels. However, the information is presented in a confusing and often inaccurate manner. For example, the claim that 'no response was least down' is unclear, and the description of the satisfaction percentages is difficult to follow, making it hard for the reader to grasp the main trends. While the total visitor numbers (74,000 and 92,000) are correctly identified, the analysis of the survey data lacks clarity and precision. The response fails to clearly highlight the key differences between the two periods, resulting in a disjointed summary that does not fully meet the requirements of the task.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is divided into paragraphs, but the internal structure is weak. The progression of ideas is often illogical, particularly in the second paragraph where data points are listed without clear transitions or comparative analysis. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'then' and 'the percentage was'. Referencing is also problematic; for instance, the phrase 'the other' is used repeatedly without a clear antecedent, which makes the text difficult to follow. The conclusion is very brief and does not effectively synthesize the information provided in the body paragraphs.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The range of vocabulary is limited and repetitive. The student relies heavily on basic terms like 'number', 'result', 'satisfied', and 'percentage'. There are several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'high rised', 'least down', and 'near about'. These errors, combined with the lack of precise terminology to describe trends (e.g., 'increased', 'decreased', 'fluctuated'), hinder the clarity of the report. The vocabulary is sufficient to convey the basic topic, but it lacks the precision and variety expected for a higher band score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There are significant issues with sentence structure, such as 'The pie chart shows that the number of the visitors to visiting the Ashdown museum before the year that the surveys of visitors satisfaction.' Subject-verb agreement is inconsistent, and there is a lack of control over complex sentence structures. Punctuation is also problematic, with many run-on sentences and missing articles. While the meaning can generally be inferred, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar makes the text difficult to read and limits the range of structures used.
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