Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

When I shows this I show this chart is Ashdown museum during the year where in the construction and before under construction.

first we start during before under construction, total visitors in museum 74000. and that time more visitors dissatisfied thair museum im percentage wise 40 below to satisfied 30 . but very low person properly happy 15 percentage . an of th and very siddatistisfied people 10 or no responce people 5.

so before under working on that very people dissatisfied.

a year of after complat all work regarding renovation many people satisfied in museum like 40. or more people very satisfied for this work or museum and we show very dissatisfied and no response ration all most same . dissatisfied people ration low then before refurbishment

all over my conclution is after construstion work is good or people motivation and review also good for visting museum . and more people visit and like to visit . i khow some people disagree but after construction is good ratio.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to address the task by summarizing the visitor numbers and satisfaction levels. However, the information provided is often inaccurate or poorly presented. For example, the student mentions '40 below to satisfied 30', which is confusing and does not clearly reflect the data. The comparison between the two periods is attempted but lacks precision, and the overall summary is hindered by a lack of clarity regarding the specific figures. The response fails to highlight the main features effectively, such as the significant increase in total visitor numbers or the shift in satisfaction categories, resulting in a response that is only partially developed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks a logical structure. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the progression of ideas is disjointed. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the repetitive use of 'and' and 'but' to connect unrelated clauses. The referencing is often unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the 'before' and 'after' periods. The conclusion is abrupt and does not effectively synthesize the information provided in the body paragraphs. Overall, the lack of clear logical organization and the misuse of cohesive devices significantly impede the flow of the text.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate. There are frequent spelling errors such as 'siddatistisfied', 'complat', 'construstion', and 'khow'. The student relies on basic, repetitive language and struggles to use appropriate terminology for describing data, such as 'ration' instead of 'ratio' or 'percentage'. The lack of precision in word choice makes it difficult to convey the intended meaning clearly. To improve, the student needs to focus on learning vocabulary related to data description and improving basic spelling and word formation.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. There is a lack of control over basic sentence structures, with many fragments and run-on sentences. Examples include 'When I shows this I show this chart is Ashdown museum' and 'dissatisfied people ration low then before refurbishment'. Subject-verb agreement is inconsistent, and there is a lack of complex sentence structures. Punctuation is also problematic, with erratic use of periods and capitalization. The high frequency of errors makes the text difficult to read and understand, indicating a need for a fundamental review of basic English grammar.

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