Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-08
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The provided table and two pie charts illustrates the number of tourists to Ashdown Museum and the charts illustrate the data of surveys asking how satisfied they were with their visit before and after the year it was refurbished.
Overall, during the year before reurbishment accounted for lowest and after refurbishment accouted for highest. However, the most of the visitor was dissatisfied before refurbishment represent highest proportion while, number of satisfied visitors accounted highest in after refurbishment.
In the table, during the year before refurbishment accounted for the lowest proportion by 74000 visitors. In contrast, after the refurbishment the number of tourist has increased by 18000.
In the pie chart, year before refurbishment 40% of visitor was dissatisfied which was accounted for highest proportion. in contrast no response visitor accounted for 5% which was lowest proportion. In the term of after refurbishment very satisfied and satisfied visitors are accounted for highest percentage 35% and 40%, likely no responeses accounted for lowest of 5%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main features of the data, including the visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. For instance, the statement 'during the year before refurbishment accounted for lowest' is grammatically unclear and lacks precision regarding the actual figures. While you identify the increase in visitors and the shift from dissatisfaction to satisfaction, the comparison between the two periods could be more analytical. You have addressed all parts of the task, but the lack of clarity in reporting data points (e.g., 'by 74000 visitors' is used incorrectly as a total) prevents a higher score.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the flow of ideas is often hindered by awkward phrasing and mechanical use of cohesive devices. Phrases like 'In the term of' and 'In the pie chart' are used to signal new points, but the internal logic within sentences is frequently broken. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the second paragraph where the comparison between the two years is confusingly expressed. The progression of information is present but lacks the sophistication required for a higher band.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on basic structures like 'accounted for' and 'highest proportion' throughout the text. There are also errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'reurbishment' and 'no responeses'. The range of vocabulary is just adequate to convey the basic meaning, but there is little evidence of the flexibility or precision needed to describe data trends effectively. To improve, you should incorporate a wider variety of verbs and adjectives to describe changes, such as 'surged', 'plummeted', or 'a significant shift'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The provided table and two pie charts illustrates'), missing articles, and awkward sentence construction (e.g., 'the most of the visitor was dissatisfied'). While you attempt some complex structures, they are often faulty. The use of punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma placement. To reach a higher band, focus on ensuring that your subjects and verbs agree and that you use articles correctly when referring to specific data points.
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