Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The table illustrates numbers of visitors to Ashdown museum during one year before and one after it was refurbished and pie chart represents results of survey by asking visitors how satisfied they were during the same two periods.
Overall, it's clear that number of visitors rose significantly after refurbishment ,It is noticable that number of visitors who was very satisfied increase after refurbishment. In contrast, dissatisfied visitors decrease considerably after refurbishment.
Looking first about total number of visitors projected from 74000 before and 92000 after. Before restoring, the survey dominant opinion was dissatisfied around 50% between dissatisfied and very dissatisfied however, after restoring become around 20% total dissatisfaction.
Turning to results of satisfaction in the survey slightly increase. year before refurbishment was very satisfied and satisfied stood at 15% and 30% recpectively. In comparison after restoring the proportion witness a jump reaching to 35% and 40%. more than 75% of visitors were satisfied. In Addition small proportion of people prefere to not response and didn't share in the survey around 5% before and after restoring
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the data, including the rise in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels. However, the reporting of data is sometimes imprecise. For example, stating 'around 50% between dissatisfied and very dissatisfied' is a vague way to interpret the chart, and the calculation of 'more than 75%' is not clearly supported by the provided figures. While the overview is present, the analysis lacks the precision required for a higher band. The comparison between the two periods is attempted, but the data points could be more accurately integrated to support the summary.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organised into logical paragraphs, and there is a clear attempt to use cohesive devices such as 'Overall', 'In contrast', and 'Turning to'. However, the flow is occasionally disrupted by mechanical errors and awkward transitions, such as 'Looking first about total number of visitors'. The use of referencing is sometimes unclear, and the paragraphing, while present, does not always group related ideas effectively. The progression of information is generally logical, but the lack of sophisticated linking words limits the coherence of the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is adequate for the task, but it is somewhat repetitive and lacks precision. Phrases like 'survey dominant opinion' and 'didn't share in the survey' are slightly unnatural. There are also spelling errors such as 'noticable' and 'recpectively'. While the student attempts to use topic-specific vocabulary like 'refurbished' and 'proportion', the range is limited. To achieve a higher score, the student should focus on using more precise collocations and ensuring accurate spelling of key terms.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede readability. Examples include subject-verb agreement issues ('number of visitors who was very satisfied') and missing articles ('illustrates numbers of visitors'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with misplaced commas and spacing issues. While the meaning is generally clear, the frequency of these errors prevents the writing from reaching a higher band. More attention to basic grammar rules and sentence construction is needed.
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