Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

THE GIVEN TABLE AND PIE CHARTS DEMONSTRATE THE RESULTS OF SURVEYS OF VISITOR SATISFACTION BEFORE AND AFTER YEAR OF DEMOLISHED OF MUSEUM.

OVERALL,THE NUMBER OF VISITORS WHICH ARE VERY SATISFIED WITH THE MUSEUM HAS INCREASED AND DISSATISFIED HAS DECLINED AFTER REFURBISHMENT.

BEFORE THE REFURBISHMENT OF ASHDOWN MUSEUM,THE TOTAL NUMBER OF VISITORS WAS 74,000.IN CONTRAST,AFTER THE REFURBISHMENT OF THE MUSEUM,THE TOTAL NUMBER OF THE VISITORS WAS 92,000.BEFORE DEMOLISHED,THE PERCENTAGE PF THE VISITORS WHICH ARE VERY SATISFIED,SATISFIED AND DISSATISFIED WAS

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response is significantly under the 150-word minimum requirement, which severely limits your ability to address the task. You have provided an overview and some initial data points, but the response is incomplete, ending abruptly mid-sentence. Because the task is not finished, you have failed to report on all the main features or make the necessary comparisons between the two periods. To improve, you must ensure you complete the analysis of all data provided in the prompt and meet the minimum word count to allow for a full development of the information.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response is too short to demonstrate a clear structure or effective paragraphing. While you have attempted an introduction and an overview, the abrupt ending prevents the development of a coherent argument or logical progression of ideas. Cohesive devices are minimal, and the lack of completion makes it difficult to assess your ability to organize information effectively. To improve, focus on structuring your response into clear paragraphs: an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs that group data logically.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and contains significant errors in word choice, such as using 'demolished' instead of 'refurbished' or 'renovated'. The repetition of phrases like 'before the refurbishment' and 'after the refurbishment' indicates a limited range. To achieve a higher score, you need to use a wider variety of vocabulary to describe trends and data, such as 'experienced a rise,' 'remained stable,' or 'a significant shift.' Avoid repeating the same structures and ensure you use precise terminology relevant to the data provided.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

There are frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('the number of visitors which are') and incorrect word forms ('year of demolished'). The sentence structures are simple and repetitive. The incomplete nature of the response also means there is no opportunity to demonstrate a range of complex grammatical structures. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and practicing the use of relative clauses and complex sentences to link your ideas more fluidly.

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