Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The mixed chart illustrates the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before In addition after it was refurbishment. the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, on the equal times.
overall, the total number of visitors increased after the Refurbishment while the number of visitors level increased after the the refurbishment.
In begin, during the time period of before recreation in the year 74,000
tourist visit in the Ashdown Museum whereas after the refurbishment visitors came 92,000 they are bigger than before tourist came in the Ashdown Museum.
In sharp contrast to that , the survey of visitors decreased Satisfied around 30 Percentage people and the large number of tourist 40 proportion dissatisfied In addition 15 % visitors very satisfied or 10 percentage very dissatisfied or more 5 % no response after refurbishment 35% very satisfied 40 percentage satisfied 15% Dissatisfied In addition very dissatisfied or no response are 5 proportion.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to address the task by summarizing the visitor numbers and survey results. However, the information is presented in a fragmented and often inaccurate manner. For example, the description of the survey data is confusing and lacks clarity, making it difficult for the reader to follow the trends. While the main features (the increase in visitor numbers) are identified, the comparison of the survey data is poorly executed and lacks the necessary precision required for an Academic Task 1 response. The data points are often misstated or presented in a way that obscures the actual findings of the charts.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. The paragraphing is ineffective, and the transition between ideas is often abrupt or confusing, such as the phrase 'In begin, during the time period of before recreation'. Cohesive devices are used in a mechanical and often incorrect way, such as the repetitive use of 'In addition' and 'whereas'. The lack of clear signposting makes it difficult to follow the progression of the report. The overall arrangement of information is disjointed, which hinders the reader's ability to grasp the main points of the data effectively.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and often misused. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'recreation' instead of 'refurbishment' and 'bigger than before tourist came'. The student struggles to use precise terminology to describe data, often relying on repetitive or inaccurate phrasing like '40 proportion' or '15 % visitors'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to convey the information with the necessary precision for an academic report, and the errors in word form and usage are noticeable throughout the text.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede communication. Sentence structures are often incomplete or poorly constructed, such as 'the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, on the equal times.' There is a lack of control over basic grammar, including subject-verb agreement, article usage, and punctuation. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, these are almost always faulty, leading to confusion. The high frequency of errors makes the text difficult to read and understand in several places.
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