Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The mix chart illustrates the frequency of visitors and result of surveys to the Ashdown Museum during the year before and the after it was refurbished.
Overall, number of visitors and result of satisfied was less before the refurbished as compared to the after the refurbished.
On the one hand, number of visitor to Ashdown Museum was 74,000 during the year before refurbishment. Additionally, frequency of visitors to the Museum was 92,000 that the same year but after the refurbished so, clearly seen that was frequency of visitors rose after the renovated.
On the other hand, surveys of visitors satisfaction was less before the renovation as compare to after the refurbished. Those people very satisfied were 15% and those visitors dissatisfied were 40% so, these ratio before the renovated but after the refurbished the percentage of very satisfied people was 35 and percentage of dissatisfied fell to 15. Moreover, other percentages also change.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the data, including the visitor numbers and the satisfaction survey results. However, the analysis is somewhat superficial. While you correctly identify the increase in visitor numbers and the shift in satisfaction levels, the comparison is hindered by unclear phrasing, such as 'result of satisfied was less'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to synthesize the data more effectively rather than simply listing figures. Ensure that all comparisons are clearly linked to the specific time periods provided in the prompt, as some of your descriptions of the 'before' and 'after' periods are slightly confusing.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand' to signal shifts in topic. However, the flow is often interrupted by awkward phrasing and repetitive sentence structures. The use of 'so' as a connector is overly informal and repetitive. To improve, try using a wider variety of linking words such as 'consequently', 'in contrast', or 'furthermore' to create a more professional and academic tone throughout the response.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision required for a higher band. You rely on basic terms like 'result', 'frequency', and 'change'. There are also issues with word forms, such as using 'refurbished' as a noun ('before the refurbished') instead of 'refurbishment'. The repetition of 'renovated' and 'refurbished' suggests a limited range. To improve, incorporate more specific vocabulary related to data reporting, such as 'proportion', 'fluctuation', 'significant increase', or 'marked improvement', and ensure you use the correct grammatical form of these words.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede the flow of the text. Examples include 'number of visitor' (should be plural), 'before the refurbished' (should be 'before the refurbishment'), and 'these ratio' (should be 'this ratio'). Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at complex sentences are often marred by errors in word order or missing articles. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of nouns versus adjectives. Practicing the construction of complex sentences with accurate punctuation will also help elevate your score.
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