Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The two pie charts illustrates results of surveys of visitor satisfaction year before refurbishment and year after refurbishment and the table illustrates total number of visitors to ash down museum before and after refurbishment
Overall number of visitors before and after refurbishment is 74,000 and 92,000 respectively. There are same results which is 40 of dissatisfied and satisfied visitors in before and after refurbishment respectively
As compared results 30 is of satisfied visitors in before and 40 in after refurbishment similarly 40 and 15 is of dissatisfied visitors respectively. 10 and 5 is of very dissatisfied visitors . both of them has equal number of results in before and after refurbishment which is of no response which is 5 . 15 and 35 is very satisfied with their visit to museum before and after renovation . all in all there are 18,000 visitors difference before and after reconstruction .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which negatively impacts the score. While you have identified the main features—the increase in visitor numbers and the shifts in satisfaction levels—the analysis is underdeveloped. You have listed figures without providing a clear, analytical comparison. For instance, stating '30 is of satisfied visitors' is unclear and lacks context. To improve, you must group data logically and provide a more comprehensive overview that synthesizes the relationship between the refurbishment and the changes in visitor sentiment. The lack of a clear summary of trends makes the response feel like a list of numbers rather than a report.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay lacks a logical structure. It is composed of very short, disjointed paragraphs that do not facilitate a smooth flow of information. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link ideas; for example, the transition between the table data and the pie chart data is abrupt. The use of referencing is also weak, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the two time periods. To improve, use linking words such as 'furthermore', 'in contrast', or 'consequently' to connect sentences and ensure each paragraph has a clear thematic focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You rely heavily on basic phrasing such as 'is of' and 'results', which does not demonstrate the range required for a higher band. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'reconstruction' when referring to a museum refurbishment. The lack of variety in reporting verbs and descriptive adjectives makes the writing feel mechanical. To improve, try to incorporate more precise vocabulary related to data description, such as 'experienced an increase', 'remained stable', or 'a significant shift in sentiment'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains several grammatical errors that impede clarity. There are frequent issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'The two pie charts illustrates') and missing articles (e.g., 'to museum'). The sentence structures are largely simple and repetitive, lacking the complexity needed to demonstrate control over a range of grammatical forms. Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly regarding the use of commas and capitalization. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring that subjects and verbs agree, and practicing the correct use of articles and prepositions in a data-reporting context.
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