Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The table chart illustrates the total numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the before and after the refurbishment.The pie chart presents the results of surveys of visitor satisfaction during the same two periods.
overall, during the year after refurbishment have higher number of visitors then the previous year.The year before refurbishment highest number of visitors dissatisfied and after it most of the visitors feel very dissatisfied.
Approximately 74000 number of visitors visited Ashdown Museum during the year before refurbishment after it 92000 visitors visit same place.The year before and after the refurbishment around 5 % visitors not gave any response.10% visitors felt satisfied before the renovation and after it decreased in their numbers to reached 5%.The year before the Remodeling 40% visitors dissatisfied with their visiting after it converted into the 15%.
The 30% visitors felt satisfied before the year while after the refurbishment it showed 40%. Before approximately 15% visitors very satisfied with their visiting and after renovation it converted into the 35%.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response successfully addresses the main features of both the table and the pie charts, presenting an overview and making relevant comparisons between the two periods. The student notes the overall increase in visitor numbers from approximately 74,000 to 92,000 and highlights key shifts in satisfaction levels, such as the drop in the 'dissatisfied' category from 40% to 15% and the rise in 'very satisfied' visitors from 15% to 35%. While some data points are slightly colloquial or loosely stated, all parts of the prompt are covered, and the key trends are clearly identified. This fulfills the requirements for Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is arranged with an introductory overview and subsequent body details, maintaining a coherent overall structure. However, paragraphing is poorly handled, with several sentences clumped together awkwardly, particularly in the second and third paragraphs. Cohesive devices are minimal and sometimes mechanical or faulty, such as 'overall, during the year after refurbishment have higher number of visitors then the previous year' and 'before it converted into the 15%.' The logical progression between sentences is occasionally hindered by abrupt shifts in referencing and a lack of smooth transitional links, placing this performance at Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is generally adequate for the task, allowing the student to convey basic numbers, percentages, and survey categories ('dissatisfied', 'satisfied', 'renovation', 'refurbishment'). However, there is a lack of precision and frequent lexical errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'visitors not gave any response', 'increased in their numbers to reached 5%', and 'visiting' used instead of 'visit' or 'experience'. Less common lexical items are attempted but often misapplied. The range is limited and repetitive, which clearly aligns with the Band 5.0 descriptor.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but control over grammar is weak, with frequent errors that occasionally impede the flow of reading. Examples of grammatical lapses include subject-verb agreement issues ('during the year after refurbishment have higher number'), missing auxiliary verbs ('around 5 % visitors not gave'), and awkward prepositions or passive voice constructions ('before the Remodeling 40% visitors dissatisfied... after it converted into the 15%'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly regarding spacing and capitalisation after full stops. These repeated structural inaccuracies place the grammar score at Band 5.0.
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