Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This table shows the information about the ashdown museum before and after it was refurbished this table is the result of the survery asking them how satisfy they are.

the table shows the number of people visit and how satify they are with the visit, a large number of people visit the musem after it was refurbished.

according to the pie chart, before the refurbishment, a great number of visitors were disatisfy almost 40% of them and 30% of them were very dissatisfied, only 10% like and satisfy from the visit while 15% of them are very sastified and 5% of them give no response.

on the other hand, after the refurbishment 40% of them were satisfied from the visit, nd 35% of them were very satisfied from the visit but moreover there are 15-20% of people who did not satisfy from the visit and they are disappointed and like before only 5% give no response about the refurbishment.

in conclusion, the museum was refurbish in a good way most of the people like it after the refurbishment, than before and after refurbishment only few were left dis satisfied

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to address the prompt by summarising the information about visitor numbers and survey satisfaction levels before and after the refurbishment of Ashdown Museum. Key features such as the increase in visitor numbers and general shifts in satisfaction percentages are mentioned. However, the report lacks precision, misinterprets some data details, and omits specific visitor number figures from the table entirely, relying instead on vague generalisations like 'a large number of people visit'. The overview is weak and embedded awkwardly into the conclusion rather than presented clearly at the beginning or end. These shortcomings place the response at Band 5.0, as it addresses the task only partially with limited and under-developed data reporting.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response shows some basic organisation, separating the introduction, body details, and a concluding remark. However, there is no clear overall progression or logical structure, and the entire text is essentially split into only a couple of run-on blocks with no proper paragraphing. Cohesive devices are very basic or missing entirely, with punctuation being largely ignored (such as missing capital letters at the start of sentences and after full stops). Referencing between sentences is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information smoothly. These features align closely with Band 4.0 descriptors for Coherence and Cohesion.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive throughout the text, relying heavily on words like 'people', 'visit', 'refurbished', and 'satisfied'. There are numerous spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'survery' for survey, 'satisfy' for satisfied, and 'disatisfy' instead of dissatisfied. Less common lexical items are attempted with significant inaccuracy, causing strain for the reader. Although the general topic is understandable, the limited range and frequent mechanical errors restrict the score to Band 4.5, as it falls between bands but displays characteristics leaning towards Band 4.0 due to the high frequency of lexical inaccuracies.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The writing demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures, consisting mainly of simple sentences joined by coordinating conjunctions or comma splices (e.g., 'this table is the result of the survery asking them how satisfy they are'). Complex sentence forms are virtually absent or heavily flawed. There are frequent, pervasive errors in grammar, punctuation, and capitalization throughout the entire response, such as lowercase sentence beginnings and missing terminal punctuation. These frequent errors obscure meaning in places and restrict the grammatical capability to a Band 4.0 level.

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