Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given table respesents the ratio of traveller at Ashdown Museum during the year before and after it was redeveloped. On the other side, the pie chart illustrate the result of calculation taking traveller that how enjoyed they were with their visit, during the equal two time.
Overall, it can be noticed, after the refurbishment more people were visit the side of Ashdown Museum. However, before the refurbishment less people were visit the Ashdown Museum.
To begin with, at Ashdown Museum, during the year before refurbishment, most people's feedback were dissatisfied around 40%. Moreover, 30% people were satisfied. very satisfied people's number were 15%. 10% people were very dissatisfied but, 5% people were not response about museum, and the total number of people were visited before refurbishment were 74,000.
On the other hand, 92,000 people were visit during the year after refurbishment such as, the highest number of people were satisfied to gave good feedback, as well as, 35% people were very satisfied. 15% people were dissatisfied. However, 5% people were very dissatisfied as well as,no give feedback about museum.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student makes an attempt to summarise the data provided in both the table and the pie charts, mentioning the visitor numbers (74,000 and 92,000) and the satisfaction percentages. However, the selection of main features is rather basic and includes several inaccuracies in interpreting the data. For instance, the feedback percentages are confused in places, and the descriptions lack a fully developed overview. The overview states that 'after the refurbishment more people were visit the side of Ashdown Museum,' which captures a main trend, but the overall response remains somewhat limited in its development and precision, aligning closely with a Band 5 performance.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is organised into paragraphs, with an introduction, an overview, and separate body paragraphs for the details. However, logical progression is frequently hindered by awkward phrasing and poor mechanical cohesion. Transition phrases such as 'On the other side,' 'To begin with,' and 'On the other hand' are used inappropriately for reporting statistical data. Referencing and referencing links between sentences are weak, causing the reader to struggle at times to follow the comparison of visitor satisfaction between the two periods. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal cohesion of the text is faulty and repetitive, placing it firmly at Band 5.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently relying on simple terms like 'people,' 'museum,' 'year,' and 'satisfaction' descriptors. There are numerous word choice and collocation errors, such as 'respesents the ratio of traveller,' 'how enjoyed they were,' 'were visit the side,' and 'no give feedback.' Less common lexical items are attempted but used incorrectly (e.g., 'redeveloped' instead of 'refurbished'). These errors occasionally impede communication and restrict the range of vocabulary to a minimally adequate level, reflecting a Band 4.5 to 5 descriptor profile, warranting a 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The essay contains a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences and flawed complex constructions. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including tense issues, passive voice misuse, and subject-verb agreement problems (e.g., 'most people's feedback were dissatisfied,' 'more people were visit,' 'the total number of people were visited'). Punctuation and word forms are also unreliable. These persistent errors cause frequent strain for the reader and demonstrate weak control over basic grammatical structures, corresponding to a Band 4.5 or 5.0.
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