Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The table depicts the number of visitors to Ashdown Meuseum during the year before and the year after it was repaired whereas pie chart illustrates the result of surveys asking patron how gratified they were with their visit,during the exact two periods.
Overall, the largest proportion accounted for number of patrons to Ashdown Meuseum after repair during the year, which was dramatically increased .The pie chart contains results of survey visitors satisfaction which includes very satisfied,very dissatisfied and no response respectively.
Initially, year before refurbishment,patrons were extremely dissatisfied whereas year after refurbishment satisfied visitors accounted for largest value and least visitors were very dissatisfied after refurbishment of ashdown meuseum.
Furthermore, year after repair of meuseum visitors being very satisfied stood at proportion 35 as compare to year before repair of meuseum which stood at least value 15. In addition, visitors has no response year before and year after refurbishment of meuseum.Consequently,year after repair of ashdown meuseum risen up as compare to year before refurbishment.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the prompt by summarizing the main features of both the table and the pie chart regarding the Ashdown Museum. However, the overview is rather superficial and lacks precise numerical data from the charts, such as the exact visitor numbers from the table. While the main trends are mentioned, such as the increase in visitors and the shift in satisfaction levels, some details are vague or imprecise, matching the descriptors for Band 5.0 where the response addresses the task only partially and ideas are limited or under-developed. Key data points like the exact visitor numbers (e.g., 2,500 to 4,800) are omitted in favor of generalized statements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The text is organized into four paragraphs, attempting an overall structure with an introduction, overview, and body paragraphs. However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by awkward phrasing and poor cohesive devices. For example, transitional phrases like 'Initially' and 'Furthermore' are used mechanically and do not accurately reflect chronological or logical relationships between the data sets. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion is faulty, and referencing is often unclear (e.g., 'the exact two periods'). This aligns closely with Band 5.0 descriptors, where there is some organization but no clear overall progression and cohesive devices are inadequate or inaccurate.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is quite basic and repetitive, with noticeable spelling and word choice errors throughout the text. Examples include 'Meuseum' (museum), 'patron' instead of patrons, 'gratified' instead of satisfied, and 'risen up' instead of increased significantly. The range is limited and minimally adequate for the task, with errors in word formation and collocation causing some difficulty for the reader. There is little control over less common vocabulary, placing this performance firmly in the Band 5.0 category where vocabulary limitations occasionally impede smooth reading.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentences, but the grammatical accuracy is weak. There are frequent errors in article usage, prepositions, and subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'visitors has no response', 'stood at proportion 35 as compare to'). Punctuation and capitalization are also inconsistent. While meaning is generally retrievable despite the frequent errors, the high density of structural inaccuracies and awkward phrasing prevents the response from reaching Band 6.0, fitting the Band 5.0 profile where frequent errors cause difficulty.
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