Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The number of visitors to ashdown museum during the year past and future it was refurbished, because the charts result of survey asking visitors their visit during the same two periods. that is the information of different two years matching. it is also compair to them.

The result of surveys visitor of satisfaction in firstly the very satisfied is before time 15 % and recent 35 %. The satisfied is similar ratio also nominal change of this year and dissatisfied is more of the difference and it is show them.

There for the no response in after and before ratio because so, change in to all parts, That is the amount of before time 74000 and recent year 92000. That was depand in public visit in continue them

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The student attempts to address the task by mentioning visitor numbers and some survey results, but the response falls significantly short of the 150-word minimum, containing only 128 words. Furthermore, the selection of information is very limited and poorly organised. While the writer notes the visitor figures (74,000 and 92,000) and touches upon satisfaction changes (such as very satisfied rising from 15% to 35%), there is no clear overview, and the data is described in a fragmented and confusing manner. Key comparisons are underdeveloped, and the overall interpretation of the charts lacks academic rigor. Because the response is under-length and fails to adequately summarise the main features, it warrants a Band 4.0 for Task Achievement.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

Coherence and cohesion are severely hindered by disjointed phrasing, lack of logical progression, and poor paragraphing. The text is broken into short, erratic paragraphs that do not logically group the information. Transitional phrases are either misused or absent, resulting in sentences that do not flow into one another (e.g., 'There for the no response in after and before ratio because so, change in to all parts'). Referencing is extremely unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow which data points are being compared. Overall, the information and ideas are not arranged coherently, aligning with the Band 4 descriptor.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used throughout the response is basic, repetitive, and often inaccurate. The writer relies heavily on simple terms and struggles with precise collocation (e.g., 'charts result of survey', 'visitor of satisfaction', 'nominal change'). There are also several instances where word forms are misused, such as 'compair' instead of compare, and 'depand' instead of depended. The range of vocabulary is extremely limited and inadequate for an academic task, causing noticeable strain for the reader and restricting the score to Band 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of disjointed and poorly constructed simple sentences. Attempts at more complex structures are heavily flawed and ungrammatical (e.g., 'The number of visitors to ashdown museum during the year past and future it was refurbished, because the charts result of survey asking visitors their visit during the same two periods'). Punctuation and capitalization are frequently neglected, and severe errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, and clause structure are present throughout. These frequent errors often distort the meaning and impede communication, placing the response firmly at Band 4.0.

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