Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The given charts illustrates the survey of ashdown down museum on the basis of very satisfied , satisfied , dissatisfied , very dissatisfied and no response and this survey is done to check what prople think after museum refurbishment.
overall, year after refurbishment has have a good respond because during the year before refurbishment there were 74000 visitors per year and after refurbishment it surge around approx 20 % which mean 92000 .
year before refurbishemnt mainly people were dissatisfied and they were approximately accounted at 40% in contrast after refurbishment it lead down to only 15% however the percentage of no response still exactly ditto as after and before refurbishment and major effect come in the very satisfied because before refurbishment it wa 15% but after it increased by 20% and became 35% moreover there is slight change in the very satisfied level because erlier it was 10 % and after ir fall to 5%
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers all parts of the task by reporting the main features from both the table and the satisfaction charts. The student successfully notes the visitor numbers before and after refurbishment (74,000 to 92,000) and describes the shifts in visitor satisfaction, correctly pointing out that dissatisfaction fell while very satisfied ratings increased, alongside a stable no-response figure. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in interpretation, such as describing a 20% increase in visitor numbers when the data shows an increase of 18,000 visitors (which is roughly 24%). Additionally, the writer mislabels the very dissatisfied category as 'very satisfied level' towards the end of the text. Overall, the main trends are addressed, earning a Band 6.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response has an overall coherent arrangement, opening with an introductory statement, followed by an overview paragraph and a body paragraph detailing the survey results. However, the structuring of the text is severely hampered by poor punctuation and a lack of proper sentence boundaries; the entire response consists of run-on sentences with virtually no capitalisation or full stops. Cohesive devices are basic and repetitive ('and', 'however', 'moreover', 'before and after'). Paragraphing is also rudimentary, as the overview and body details are awkwardly fused or split. This lack of control over basic text structuring keeps the score at a Band 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The student uses an adequate range of vocabulary suitable for discussing survey results and percentages, employing terms like 'refurbishment', 'dissatisfied', 'percentage', and 'surge'. However, there are noticeable spelling and word-choice errors ('illustrates' instead of 'illustrate', 'ashdown down', 'prople', 'respond' instead of 'response', 'erlier', 'ir'). Furthermore, vocabulary is occasionally misused or imprecise, such as 'lead down' instead of 'decrease' or 'decline'. These errors cause some distraction and occasional difficulty for the reader, fitting the Band 5.0 descriptors.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The writer attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, incorporating clauses of contrast and relative time references. However, the grammatical accuracy is weak. The text suffers from a complete absence of proper punctuation, comma splices, and run-on sentences. There are also agreement and tense errors, such as 'year after refurbishment has have a good respond' and 'it wa 15%'. Complex structures are frequently faulty due to poor subordination and missing punctuation. Frequent errors in basic sentence construction place this at a Band 5.0.
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