Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Before the renowation the people are not so much pleased but after the restoration it increase by one e quater.And the numer of vistor is also increase after renovation.
In this paragraph is begin as when the museum of ashdown i not refurbishment then the total number of vistor is 74000 but after the restoration of this museum its vistors increase to 92000. Before the refurbishment of this museum it is not very much satisfied it is only 15 percent but after the changing it increase to 35 percent. Earliar the ratio of satisfied is 30 percent but after that it rocket up to 40 percent.
Before the restoration of it the people who dissatisfied is 40 percent i think which is very much but when the che changing is made in this museum then the peple who dissatisfied is decrease to 15 percent. And person did on give any response is almost 5 persent in both side.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to cover the main features of the prompt, mentioning the visitor numbers before and after refurbishment (74,000 and 92,000) as well as the survey percentages for satisfaction categories. However, the data presentation lacks clarity and contains some inaccuracies or misinterpretations. For instance, the opening sentence claims visitor numbers increased by 'one quarter', which is mathematically inaccurate since 92,000 is roughly a 24.3 percent increase, though close. Furthermore, the overall overview is weak, and the response fails to fully integrate and synthesise the tables and charts effectively. Ideas are somewhat disjointed and lack a clear, overarching summary of the main trends. Therefore, it meets the basic requirements of addressing the prompt, but stays within the lower-middle band due to inadequate data selection and development.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The text is divided into paragraphs, but the logical progression and overall coherence are severely disrupted by poor sentence structure and weak paragraph organisation. While the second paragraph attempts to list survey data points, transitions are mechanical and confusing ('In this paragraph is begin as...'). Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, and referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult to follow the relationships between ideas and data points. Paragraphing is present, but the internal flow within paragraphs fails to maintain a clear, logical thread. This places the response firmly in the lower bands for cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic, repetitive, and heavily flawed. The student relies on rudimentary terms and makes numerous spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'renowation' for renovation, 'vistor' for visitor, 'Earliar' for earlier, and 'peple' for people. There are also inappropriate phrase choices like 'rocket up' used somewhat incorrectly or informally, and awkward expressions such as 'person did on give any response'. The lexical range is severely limited, which frequently strains the reader and impedes clear communication throughout the task.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the response, featuring a very limited range of sentence structures. Most complex or compound attempts are faulty and riddled with basic errors in subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, and prepositions (e.g., 'the people are not so much pleased', 'the museum of ashdown i not refurbishment', 'the people who dissatisfied is 40 percent'). Punctuation and word forms are frequently incorrect. These frequent, pervasive errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader and prevent the response from achieving a higher score.
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