Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The table represents tha data of ashdown museum durig the year before and the year after refurbished. The data concluded on surveys by asking visitors their satisfaction levels.
Overall, the year before renovation number of visitors was 74,000. While, after renovate visitors exceeds upto 92,000. It is clearly evident that mostly visitors are satisfied and happy with the refurbished of museum.
Before, renovation the museum visitors were very satisfied only 15% and increased dramatically to 35% after refurbished in only just one year. staisfied museum users were 30% before renovate which also significantly increased in very next year after refurbished.
Most significant changes noticed in dissatisfied users. Before refurbished dissatisied visitors was was 40% which droped sharply in following yaer after renovation. It seems the purpose of renovation achieved. Some minor changes also evident in both years like, very dissatisfied users was 10% and no response was 5% before renovation and after rebuild the musum very dissatisfied users droped to 5% and no response useres remain unchanged.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main features of the prompt by presenting the visitor numbers and the survey results for both periods. The writer successfully reports the overarching data, noting the increase in total visitor numbers from 74,000 to 92,000, and highlights shifts in satisfaction levels, such as the drop in dissatisfied users. However, the overview is rather weak, and there are minor inaccuracies in reporting percentages (for instance, stating that very satisfied visitors were 'only 15%' when that was the figure before, and incorrectly implying that percentages for all categories add up cleanly or are interpreted with precise proportion language). Despite these minor flaws, all parts of the task are addressed, and the comparisons made are generally relevant.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The text is organised into four paragraphs: an introduction, an overview, and two body paragraphs detailing the survey results. There is a logical progression from overall numbers to specific satisfaction ratings. However, cohesive devices are sometimes mechanical or awkwardly placed (e.g., 'While, after renovate visitors exceeds upto...'). Paragraphing is attempted, but referencing and transitions between sentences can be abrupt. While the overall arrangement is coherent, the faulty use of cohesive markers and repetitive sentence openings prevent the response from achieving a higher band.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task, with attempts to use less common items such as 'refurbished', 'significantly', and 'dramatically'. However, there are numerous word-choice and form errors throughout the text, including 'tha data', 'durig', 'renovate' instead of 'renovation', 'dissatisied', and 'yaer'. These errors demonstrate a limited control of word formation and spelling. While communication is not severely impeded, the frequency of lexical inaccuracies places this response firmly at Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response displays a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but grammatical control is weak. There are frequent errors in tense, subject-verb agreement, and prepositions, such as 'visitors was 74,000', 'visitors exceeds upto', 'Before, renovation the museum visitors were very satisfied only 15%', and 'dissatisied visitors was was 40% which droped sharply'. Punctuation is also erratic, with unnecessary commas disrupting sentence flow. Although the writer attempts complex structures, the high frequency of basic grammatical errors causes some difficulty for the reader.
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