Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The table shows information about Ashdown Museum wellcome its visitors during the year before refurbishment and after refurbishment as well as the pie charts illustrate the results of interview questions about their satisfaction over the period.
Overall, it is clear that the total number of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year after refurbishment is higher than before refurbishment and for survey most of the people were dissatisfied before refurbishment as well as people were satisfied after refurbishment, even some people are interested in survey.
First of all, the total number of arrivals to Ashdown Museum during the whole year before refurbishment were 74000 and after refurbishment its rose up over the period which were 92000.
On the other hand, most of the people are disagree before refurbishment which were 40% and some person were not interested in survey and they were just 5% and these are the same person were very disagree after refurbishment they have only 5% of survey visitors. some people were very disagree which are 10% before refurbishment and 5% after reburbishment as well. The maximum proportion of prople after refurbishment which were 40 % and they were satified and 15% were dissatisfied and 35% of people were very satisfied.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The student successfully reports the main data points from both the table and the charts, correctly identifying the total visitor numbers (74,000 before and 92,000 after) and summarising the shifts in satisfaction levels (e.g., noting that visitors were predominantly dissatisfied before refurbishment at 40% and more satisfied after, with 35% very satisfied). An overview is provided in the second paragraph, contrasting overall visitor volume and satisfaction trends. However, the data presentation in the body paragraphs is occasionally muddled and confused by poor phrasing, particularly regarding percentages and categories, which prevents the response from reaching a higher band. Nevertheless, all parts of the prompt are addressed.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is arranged into four paragraphs, attempting an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs addressing the table and charts separately. However, logical progression is frequently hindered by clumsy transitions and a lack of cohesive devices. Referencing is sometimes unclear, such as in the final paragraph where phrases like 'these are the same person' create confusion. Paragraphing is attempted but internal cohesion within sentences is often faulty and mechanical, leading to a choppy and difficult reading experience.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently relying on simple terms like 'people', 'survey', and 'refurbishment'. There are several noticeable word-choice and collocation errors, such as 'wellcome its visitors' instead of 'welcoming visitors', 'its rose up' instead of 'it rose', and 'are disagree' instead of 'were dissatisfied'. These errors cause some difficulty for the reader and reflect a limited lexical range appropriate for Task 1 academic writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentence forms, but control over grammar and punctuation is weak. There are frequent errors in tense consistency ('were 74000 and after refurbishment its rose up'), subject-verb agreement ('the total number of arrivals... were'), and word forms ('satified', 'reburbishment'). Furthermore, run-on sentences with poor clause linking, such as 'some person were not interested in survey and they were just 5% and these are the same person...', severely disrupt readability and reduce accuracy.
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