Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The table presents the quantity of visitors to Ashdown Museum over the year before the year after it was renovated. The chart illustrates the outcomes of analysis by asking the satisfaction of tourist about visting, during same period. The satisfaction include very satisfied, satisfied, dissatisfied, very dissatisfied, and no response.

Overall, 40% of visitors were dissatisfied by the refurbishment on recent year, while 40% of visitors were satisfied by refurbishment after some year. Moreove, 5% of visitors have no any response in recent year.

In recent year of refurbishment, 40% of visitors were dissatisfied with refurbishment, while 5% of visitors have no respone what to say. Moreover, 74000 visitors were came to visit Ashdown Museum.

After some year of refurbishment, 40% of visitors were satisfied by refurbishment while 5% of visitors were satisfied and

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to cover both the table and the chart, mentioning visitor numbers (74,000) and satisfaction percentages. However, the student has failed to meet the minimum length requirement of 150 words, stopping abruptly at 134 words with an unfinished sentence. Furthermore, there are significant factual misinterpretations of the data, such as confusing the year before refurbishment with 'recent year' and misreporting the survey figures. For instance, the text claims that 40% were dissatisfied in the recent year, whereas the chart shows 40% dissatisfaction before refurbishment and 15% after. Due to the incomplete text and inaccurate data reporting, the score reflects a partial and underdeveloped response.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The essay is poorly organised with very brief, disconnected paragraphs, and it trails off mid-sentence at the end. While basic cohesive devices like 'Overall' and 'Moreover' are attempted, logical progression is severely disrupted by the fragmentation of the text. Paragraphing is inadequate, consisting mostly of isolated single-sentence blocks that do not effectively group related information about the surveys and the table data together. Referencing is also weak, making it difficult to follow the comparison between the two time periods.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The lexical range is limited and repetitive, with frequent awkward phrasings and word choices, such as 'quantity of visitors', 'outcomes of analysis', and 'asking the satisfaction of tourist about visting'. There are noticeable errors in word forms and collocation, such as 'have no any response' and 'respone what to say'. The vocabulary used is basic and barely adequate to communicate the ideas, and spelling errors like 'respone' further detract from the quality of the writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The writer attempts some complex structures, but these are frequently faulty or incomplete, culminating in a sentence fragment at the very end of the text. There are numerous grammatical errors throughout, including tense confusion ('were came', 'are dissatisfied by the refurbishment on recent year'), preposition misuse ('by refurbishment', 'on recent year'), and subject-verb agreement issues. These frequent errors cause difficulty for the reader and prevent the response from achieving a higher band.

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