Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-17
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
This table illustrate number of visitors to Ashdown museum before and after renovate. Conducted survey of visitors how much they were satisfied before and after year.
Total seventy four thousand visitors came to Ashdown museum during the year before refurbishment. The given results of year before renovation the most satisfied number's of visitors were 15% which are almost not too much and the percentage of satisfied visitors have 30% and the ratio of dissatisfied peoples among visitors have 40% which is highly ratio among all. Very dissatisfied visitors were 10% and those peoples who shows zero interest in giving response to survey are 5% among all visitors.
Total ratio of visitors after refurbishment increasing after the year it was 9200%. Ratio of very satisfied peoples were increased to 35% and satisfied peoples ratio remain same. Due to advancement percentage of dissatisfied peoples decreased to 15% its a good sign for museum. Very dissatisfied peoples also increased its ratio is 5%. Those peoples shows no interest also remain same as before renovation.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to cover all parts of the task by reporting the visitor numbers and the survey results for both periods. Key data points are mentioned, such as the initial 74,000 visitors, the rise to 92,000, and various satisfaction percentages. However, there are significant inaccuracies in data reporting and interpretation. For example, the student writes that 'the percentage of very satisfied visitors were 15% which are almost not too much' and states an absurd figure of '9200%' for the increase. Furthermore, there is a lack of a clear overall trend summary, and the mechanical listing of percentages shows a lack of selection and synthesis of main features. This performance aligns with Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is divided into three paragraphs, providing a basic framework for introduction, the first period, and the second period. However, the overall progression is weak and jerky due to abrupt transitions and confusing sentences like 'Conducted survey of visitors how much they were satisfied before and after year.' Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, with repetitive referencing structures such as 'The given results of year before renovation' and 'Total ratio of visitors'. Paragraphing is attempted, but ideas within paragraphs lack smooth logical linking, which impedes the reader's flow. This corresponds to Band 5.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive, frequently relying on simple terms like 'visitors', 'satisfied', and 'renovation'. There are noticeable word choice and collocation errors, such as 'before and after renovate' instead of 'before and after renovation', and 'number's of visitors' with an incorrect apostrophe. The misuse of scale and percentage terms ('9200%', 'highly ratio') further restricts the precision of the response. The lexical range is minimally adequate to convey basic points about the chart, but errors cause some difficulty. This fits Band 5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The student demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying mostly on simple sentences with frequent structural errors. Examples of severe grammatical inaccuracies include 'This table illustrate number' (subject-verb agreement), 'Conducted survey of visitors how much they were satisfied' (incomplete and ungrammatical clause structure), and 'Those peoples shows no interest' (missing relative pronoun/tense error). Plural forms are incorrectly handled ('peoples', 'number's'). Errors are frequent throughout the text and frequently impede clear communication, placing this at Band 4.0.
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