Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The table demonstrates the number of tourist in the ashdown museum. The pie chart illustrates the data collected from the visitors.
Overall, shows the Number of tourist before the refurbishment and after refurbishment. In older musum number of visitors was around 74,000, While after structural enhancement number of travelles is about 92,000.
Museum before modernization, Survey data of disatisfied was nearly 40%. This was a higher data for the survey. However, After improvement of museum dissatisfied data go down approximatly 15%. Satisfied people before were around 30% controversely, after refurbishment data go up about 40%.
Subsequently, Data of satisfication before was rougly 10% Altough, after improvement satisfication of people about 5%. Describing trends, satisfication of travellers reduce after enhancement of museum.But, the survey data of no reponse peoples remain 5% before and after constraction. Despite this, number of visitors increase after modernization 74,000 to 92,000. Big difference of visitors before and after refurbishment.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The student attempts to address the task by summarizing both the table of visitor numbers and the survey charts concerning visitor satisfaction. The main features are identified, such as the increase in total visitor numbers from 74,000 to 92,000 and the shift in dissatisfaction rates from 40% before refurbishment down to 15% after. However, the overview is weak, ungrammatically structured, and placed awkwardly after the first paragraph. Furthermore, some data points are misinterpreted or inaccurately described in the body paragraphs (for instance, misinterpreting the very dissatisfied or no response categories). While the prompt is generally addressed, the lack of a clear, coherent overview and occasional inaccuracies in data reporting prevent this response from achieving a higher band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response attempts paragraphing, dividing the introduction, overview, and body details, but the logical flow and progression are weak. The overview sentence ("Overall, shows the Number of tourist...") is poorly integrated and ungrammatical. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or repetitively (e.g., starting multiple sentences with "However,", "Subsequently,", or "Despite this,"), and referencing is often unclear. Paragraphing structure does not consistently support a logical progression of ideas, making the overall organization feel disjointed and mechanical.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is basic and repetitive, frequently reusing terms like "visitors", "tourist", "refurbishment", and "satisfaction" with numerous spelling and word-form errors (e.g., "travelles", "musum", "disatisfied", "approximatly", "controversely", "rougly", "Altough", "reponse", "constraction"). There are also awkward word choices and collocations (e.g., "higher data for the survey", "dissatisfied data go down"). The lexical range is limited and minimally adequate for the task, with frequent errors causing some difficulty for the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains a very limited range of grammatical structures, relying heavily on simple sentences or faulty attempts at complex ones. There are pervasive grammatical errors throughout the text, including missing articles (e.g., "number of tourist in the ashdown museum"), incorrect verb tenses and forms (e.g., "satisfaction of travellers reduce", "number of visitors increase"), and severe punctuation and capitalization issues. These frequent errors frequently impede smooth reading and demonstrate poor control over basic grammar and sentence construction.
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