Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The number of visitors to Ashdown Museum in two during year and first during year before refurbishment to visit 74000 and after during refurbishment to visit 92000.

The number of visitors to Ashdown Museum visit to result in chart and results of surveys of visitors satisfaction before year very satisfied to 15%. Dissatisfied surveys 40% and satisfied surveys 30%. No response visitors satisfaction 5%.

Moreover, after year refurbishment no response and very dissatisfied visitors surveys are equal 5%. High visitors surveys satisfied and very satisfied both are 5% different satisfied 40% and very satisfied 35%. Before and after are common chart but servey review different.

In conclusions, this is before visitors surveys satisfaction number his down and after visitors surveys number is high because should be very satisfied, very dissatisfied, dissatisfied his very high. Before surveys visitors dissatisfied, satisfied number of high and very dissatisfied,no response, very satisfied number is down.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to present the main data points from the prompt, noting the visitor figures of 74,000 before and 92,000 after refurbishment, as well as mentioning percentages for different satisfaction levels. However, the selection and reporting of data are incomplete and imprecise. The text struggles to accurately convey the survey results, resulting in confusion regarding the exact percentages and categories. Furthermore, there is no clear overall overview provided in a structured manner, and the summary of trends remains underdeveloped and difficult to follow due to poor phrasing.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The logical organization of the text is severely impaired. Although paragraphs are used to separate different aspects of the visual data, the progression of ideas is disjointed and confusing. Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, such as the abrupt transitions between sentences and paragraphs (e.g., 'Moreover, after year refurbishment...'). Referencing is frequently unclear, making it very difficult for the reader to follow the intended comparisons between the 'before' and 'after' data sets.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The lexical range is extremely limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic vocabulary found directly in the prompt, such as 'visitors', 'museum', 'refurbishment', and 'surveys'. There are frequent inappropriate word choices and collocations, such as 'visit to result in chart' and 'his down', which heavily strain comprehension. The student attempts to use percentage terms, but vocabulary control is insufficient to express the data accurately or naturally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely restricted. The response consists almost entirely of flawed, fragmented, or poorly constructed simple sentences, with no reliable control over complex structures. Grammatical errors are pervasive throughout the text—such as missing verbs, incorrect prepositions, and scrambled word order (e.g., 'Before and after are common chart but servey review different'). These errors constantly impede communication and disrupt the flow of reading.

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