Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The pie chart depicts the amount of people who visited the ashdown museum before and after its renovation.

Overall,it presents that very dissatisfaction rate was increased after renovation but the dissatisfied rate decreased and satisfaction rate also increased,person who did not responded remained same.

Before reconstruction very satisfied people was 15 percent and very dissatisfied and dissatisfied rate was 30 and 40% respectively and satisfied rate was 10%.

After reconstruction very satisfied dissatisfied and very dissatisfied rate showed surge with 35,45 and 15% respectively.no of visitors also goes up from 74000 ton82000;that is a large amount of difference that is unignoreable.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The student attempts to summarise the data, but falls significantly short of the word count requirement of 150 words, reaching only 101 words. This severely limits the extent to which the main features and comparisons can be reported. Furthermore, there are noticeable inaccuracies in reading the data, such as claiming the dissatisfaction rate increased after renovation when the chart shows it decreased from 40% to 15% (and a minor typo reading numbers as 45% instead of 40%). Visitor numbers are also misquoted as 82,000 instead of 92,000. Due to the severe under-length and data inaccuracies, this falls under band 4.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is structured into four very brief paragraphs attempting an introduction, overview, and body details. However, paragraphing and logical progression are weak. Sentences are disjointed, and cohesive devices are minimal or misused (e.g., 'Overall,it presents that...'). The lack of proper punctuation and capitalisation throughout the text ('ashdown museum', 'unignoreable') further impedes smooth readability and cohesion, restricting the score to a band 5.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive ('rate', 'satisfied', 'dissatisfied', 'reconstruction'). There are multiple errors in word choice and data reporting. Spelling mistakes are evident, such as 'unignoreable' and 'responded' instead of 'respond'. The student attempts some less common terms like 'surge', but incorrect data reading undermines their effective use. Overall, the lexical range is narrow and inadequate for a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex structures contain frequent errors. There are major punctuation and capitalisation errors across the response, such as missing spaces after commas and periods ('Overall,it', 'respectively.no'), lower-case letters for proper nouns ('ashdown museum'), and incorrect subject-verb agreement ('very satisfied people was 15 percent'). Errors are frequent and often cause strain for the reader.

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