Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-19
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The table below illustrates the number of visitors to Ashdown Musem during the year before and after the year it was refurbished.The table below demnostrates the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two period.
firstly , the total number of visitors to ashdown museum during the year before refurbishment the total number of visitor is 74,000.however, the survey illustrates the five different factors which are asked by the public first one is 15% very satisfied next 30% satisfied but the number of dissatisfied is 40%which is the larger amount of people furthur more ,10%is very dissatisfied and 5%didn't respond.
Secondly after the refurbishment 92,000 individuals visit the ashdown museum. The survey after refurbishment 40% of the public staisfied with the refurbishment 35% are very satisfied and the number of dissatified people are 15% however, very dissatisfied are 5% and no response 5% as well.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main data points provided in the visual prompt, such as the overall visitor numbers (74,000 before and 92,000 after) and the survey percentages for satisfaction levels. However, the overview is entirely missing, and the data is presented mechanically as a list of statistics rather than as a well-selected summary. For instance, the writer states 'the total number of visitor is 74,000. however, the survey illustrates the five different factors'. Key trends, such as the significant increase in 'very satisfied' and 'satisfied' visitors alongside the drop in 'dissatisfied' respondents, are not synthesized effectively to give a clear overall picture of the changes.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is divided into paragraphs, but the overall logical progression is weak. Mechanical and repetitive transitional markers are used, such as 'firstly', 'first one is', and 'Secondly', which disrupts the natural flow of ideas. Furthermore, referencing is frequently unclear, and sentences lack smooth connections. For example, the transition from discussing total visitor numbers directly into survey percentages in the second paragraph ('during the year before refurbishment the total number of visitor is 74,000.however, the survey illustrates...') lacks appropriate cohesive ties and structural integration. Paragraphing is attempted but remains basic.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is generally repetitive and basic, relying heavily on words directly copied from the prompt or simple terms like 'number', 'people', and 'survey'. There are also spelling errors ('Musem', 'demnostrates', 'period' instead of periods, 'furthur more', 'staisfied', 'dissatified'), which show limited control over word formation and spelling. While the numerical terms and basic categories are communicated, the range of vocabulary is restricted and inadequate for higher bands, preventing any precise or flexible expression of the data.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The text displays a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex or compound structures are heavily flawed by punctuation and structural errors, such as run-on sentences and missing capitalization (e.g., 'The table below illustrates... The table below demnostrates...'). Frequent grammatical errors—including subject-verb agreement issues ('the number of dissatisfied is 40%which is the larger amount of people') and missing articles—cause noticeable difficulty for the reader and impede smooth comprehension throughout the response.
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