Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

thet table bellow shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown meseum during the year before and the year after it was redurbished and we see that during the refurbishment period there was about 74000 visitors while the number is incresd after a year from meuseum refrubishment to 92000 visitors , that mean that the number of visitors is increse with abou 18000 visitors .

how ever the other chart is showing the result of a survveys asking visitors how they were satisfied with threir visi during the same tow periods and we are marking that in the period before refubishment that the most percentage of visitors were not sutisfided wit a oercentage if 40/100 while 15/100 were very satisfied anf 5/100 didn't give a repons , in the opposit side we see that the mojority od visitors were satisfid aftr the refrubishment of the meusiem with the less of persso were't satisfied and it kept the same value of pessin that they were not give an ansewr

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The student attempts to address the task by reporting the visitor numbers (74,000 before and 92,000 after refurbishment, with an increase of 18,000) and touching upon the survey results regarding visitor satisfaction. However, the response lacks a clear overview or effective selection and comparison of all main trends. For instance, the survey data is transcribed in a somewhat confusing and inaccurate manner, stating that the majority were 'not satisfied with a percentage if 40/100', whereas the chart shows 40% were dissatisfied and 10% very dissatisfied. The second half of the survey breakdown is difficult to follow due to severe language errors. Furthermore, the response is written as a single, massive run-on block of text without proper paragraphing. Overall, the response addresses the task only partially and the key features are not fully or clearly developed, aligning closely with Band 5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

Coherence and cohesion are severely compromised in this response. The entire text consists of just two extremely long run-on sentences connected by weak coordinating conjunctions like 'and' and punctuation errors. There are no distinct paragraphs to separate the data overview from the survey analysis. Cohesive devices are either repetitive or inaccurate, such as 'how ever' and 'in the opposit side'. The logical progression of ideas is hindered by a lack of cohesive control and punctuation, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of information. This reflects the characteristics of Band 4, where information and ideas are not arranged coherently.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The student demonstrates a very limited and repetitive lexical range with numerous spelling errors throughout the text. Examples of misspellings and flawed word choices include 'thet' (the), 'bellow' (below), 'meseum' (museum), 'redurbished' (refurbished), 'incresd' (increased), 'refrubishment' (refurbishment), 'survveys' (surveys), 'sutisfided' (satisfied), 'mojority' (majority), 'satisfid' (satisfied), and 'ansewr' (answer). While the student attempts some less common vocabulary items related to the prompt (e.g., 'refurbishment', 'percentage', 'majority'), the high frequency of basic spelling and lexical errors causes significant strain for the reader, placing the response firmly at Band 4.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The grammatical range is extremely limited. The response relies on endless compound structures linked by commas and conjunctions rather than controlled complex sentences. There are frequent and systematic errors in tense usage ('is incresd', 'is increse with abou', 'is showing'), subject-verb agreement ('there was about 74000 visitors'), and prepositional use. Punctuation is virtually absent in terms of proper sentence boundaries, resulting in massive run-on sentences. These persistent errors frequently distort meaning and impede communication, which is characteristic of a Band 4 performance.

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