Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-21
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The table illustrates the quantity of tourists to Ashdown Museum between the year before and the year after when it was redbuilt.
Overall, it is clear that before and after the year when was Ashdown Museum rebuilt and how many tourists were happy and satisfied about this visit.And how asking about its from the visitors that they were satisfied or not satisfied.
One of the most major part of its is before renew the museum.During the year before refurbishment 74000 people were include into.15%tourists were very happy about it and 30 % properly satisfied.And 40% were disagree and 10% were very disatisfied.And 5% had no response.
On the other hand, during the year after the refurbishment 92000 people were included into.And here 35%visitors were very happy and the 40%visitors were satisfied.And the 15%tourists were disageed and the 5% visitors were very unhappy and dissatisfied.5% visitors had no response about it.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The student attempts to address the task by reporting the visitor numbers (74,000 and 92,000) and the satisfaction survey data for both periods. However, the overview is extremely confused and fails to clearly summarise the main trends, such as the increase in total visitor numbers and the overall rise in satisfaction levels. Furthermore, the phrasing in the introduction and overview is fragmented and barely understandable. While the key figures are mentioned, the lack of a coherent summary and the presence of severe misinterpretation in the overview limit the score to a Band 4.0.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The text is divided into short paragraphs, but the logical flow and progression are heavily disrupted by severe cohesion and grammar issues. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or repetitively (e.g., starting multiple sentences with 'And' or 'During'). The introduction and overview fail to create a clear structural roadmap for the response, making it difficult for the reader to follow the comparison between the two periods. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion is weak and mechanical.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and frequently incorrect. Words like 'redbuilt', 'renew', 'disagree' (used instead of 'dissatisfied'), and 'included into' demonstrate a very limited range of lexical items and poor control of word choice and collocation. Phrasing such as 'how asking about its from the visitors' is non-standard and impedes comprehension. The student struggles to accurately convey the statistical data due to inadequate vocabulary.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The response exhibits a very limited range of sentence structures, relying almost entirely on simple sentences that frequently contain serious grammatical errors. There are frequent issues with prepositions ('into'), verb forms ('was Ashdown Museum rebuilt'), and sentence fragments ('And how asking about its from the visitors'). Complex structures are rarely attempted, and when they are, they are inaccurate. Errors are frequent and often cause strain for the reader.
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