Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
there is a chart shows how before and after refurbishment has changed the viewership from 74000 to 92000. refurbishment has played a pivotal role to increase the visitors in the ashdown museum.
74000 people visited the museum year before refurbishment. according o the survey of the museum before refurbishment, 5% people doesn't respond, 10% were very disappointed, 40% were not satisfied, 10% were satisfied, and 15% were extremely satisfied.
according to the survey of museum,92000 people visited the museum during the year after the refurbishment. out of 92000 people 35% people were very satisfied, 40% were just satisfied, 15% were dissatisfied, 5% were very dissatisfied and remaining 5% didn't respond but overall it has changed positively so, the refurbishment of the museum was worth doing
In conclusion, refurbishment does drastic change in visitors. the number of visitors has changed from 74k to 92k. 18k people were increased by the year of refurbishment.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student manages to cover the main data points, noting the visitor numbers before and after refurbishment (74,000 and 92,000 respectively) and outlining the survey results for satisfaction levels. However, there are significant inaccuracies in reporting the data. For instance, the student states that before refurbishment '10% were very disappointed, 40% were not satisfied, 10% were satisfied, and 15% were extremely satisfied', which misquotes the actual percentages from the prompt (15% very satisfied, 30% satisfied, 40% dissatisfied, 10% very dissatisfied). Furthermore, the overview lacks clear synthesis of the most striking trends, such as the overall shift from dissatisfaction to satisfaction. While the task is addressed, the factual errors and lack of a robust overview keep this at a Band 5.0 level.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is divided into short paragraphs, but the paragraphing is underdeveloped and chaotic, with sentences strung together without proper logical progression. Cohesive devices are minimal and basic (e.g., 'according to', 'In conclusion'). The text lacks a smooth flow, and the referencing is sometimes unclear, such as the abrupt transition into survey data without adequate signposting. There is no clear overarching structure guiding the reader from the table data to the survey charts, resulting in a disjointed presentation. This fits the Band 5 descriptor where organisation is present, but overall progression is lacking and cohesive devices are inadequate.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is repetitive and basic, heavily relying on words directly lifted from the prompt such as 'refurbishment', 'visitors', and 'museum'. There are noticeable limitations in lexical range and precision, such as 'viewership' instead of 'visitor numbers' and 'drastic change' which is slightly unnatural in this context. Collocations are occasionally awkward (e.g., '18k people were increased'). Spelling and word formation are generally acceptable for basic words, but the overall lack of less common vocabulary and lexical flexibility restricts the score to a Band 5.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The response contains severe punctuation and capitalization errors throughout the text (e.g., starting sentences with lowercase letters like 'there is' and 'according o'). There is a very limited range of grammatical structures, and attempts at complex sentences are basic or flawed. Grammatical errors are frequent; for instance, '5% people doesn't respond' exhibits subject-verb agreement issues and tense inconsistency, and '18k people were increased' misuses the passive voice. These frequent errors cause some difficulty for the reader and reflect a Band 5 level of grammatical control.
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