Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The table illustrates the figurated values of visitors during the year before and the year after the Ashdown Museum was refurbished.
Substantially, the number of people visitng the Ashdown Museum before its development was estimated to 74 thousand, however, those who visited after the refurbishment were just about 92 thousand.
The information is given, provided the level of satisfaction among the individual stepping into the museum before and after the years of renovation.
Detailed study has been made, regarding the Ashdown Museum, using statistical results shown in the survey. The adequacy of visitors who are
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response fails to satisfy the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, stopping abruptly at only 95 words. Consequently, the report is severely incomplete; it only mentions the overall visitor numbers (74,000 before and 92,000 after) and briefly introduces the satisfaction survey without presenting any of the survey data or making the necessary comparisons. While the opening paraphrases the prompt adequately, the severe under-length and lack of a complete overview and body paragraphs covering the satisfaction charts prevent the response from achieving a higher band score under the official IELTS descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5
The response is heavily fragmented due to its short length and ends mid-sentence ('The adequacy of visitors who are'). While the writer attempts to introduce different sections of the visual data across separate opening sentences, there is no overall logical progression because the essay cuts off before the main body can develop. Paragraphing is disjointed and incomplete, and cohesive devices are limited to basic connectors like 'however', which restricts the flow of information across the text.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
The vocabulary used is generally adequate for basic communication, though there are awkward lexical choices and word formation errors, such as 'figurated values' instead of 'figures' or 'data', and 'visitng' (spelling error). The writer attempts some less common vocabulary items like 'refurbished' and 'satisfaction', but the limited output and noticeable errors in word choice restrict the lexical range displayed.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
The essay demonstrates a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as the comparative structure using 'however'. However, there are grammatical inaccuracies and awkward prepositional usage, such as 'estimated to 74 thousand' instead of 'estimated at', and 'provided the level of satisfaction among the individual stepping'. Furthermore, the response is incomplete, terminating abruptly with an unfinished clause, which negatively impacts the overall grammatical assessment.
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