Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
Here, we can explain the idea about ashdown museum where we can judge how much vistors are visits before refurbishment and after refurbishment. According to the graph that shown in the figure asked that visitore are increases after refurbishment.
On the one hand, according to the graph about before refurbishment, where visitor satrength was visited before refurbishment to the ashdown mesuem is low rathar than to other graph.In this graph 40 percent individuals are disatisfied about this museum, 30 percent are very dissatisfied,15 percent are very satisfied, 10 percent are satisfied and 5 percent are no responsed.
On the other hand, after refurbishment visited report is satisfied rathar than to other graph.In this graph, I am going to describe the snariou of visitors report to the ashdown museum where 40 percent vistors are very satisfied,35 percent vistors are very satisfied, 15 percent visitors are dissatisfied,5 percent are very dissatisfied and 5 percents are no response.
In conclusion,we can say that first graph that have a low satisfied visitors as compare to other graph where Satisfied visitors are 40 percent.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize both the table data regarding visitor numbers and the survey charts regarding visitor satisfaction. However, there are significant inaccuracies in reporting the data. For instance, the student states that '40 percent individuals are disatisfied' and '30 percent are very dissatisfied' before refurbishment, whereas the chart shows 40% dissatisfied and 10% very dissatisfied. Furthermore, the data description for the period after refurbishment contains contradictory statements ('40 percent vistors are very satisfied, 35 percent vistors are very satisfied'). The overall number of visitors (74,000 rising to 92,000) is mentioned in the introduction but not fully integrated. Due to inaccurate data reporting and lack of a clear overview, the score falls into Band 5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response is organized into four paragraphs, following a basic introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion structure. However, the progression of ideas is frequently disrupted by awkward phrasing and confusing transitions. The student attempts to use standard cohesive markers such as 'On the one hand' and 'On the other hand', but these are misapplied given the contrast is between two different time periods rather than two opposing arguments. Paragraphing is present, but internal cohesion is weak and repetitive, leading to an overall score of Band 5.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
The vocabulary used is very basic and repetitive. Words such as 'graph', 'visitors', and 'satisfied' are overused throughout the text. There are numerous spelling errors ('ashdown', 'vistors', 'satrength', 'mesuem', 'rathar', 'disatisfied', 'responsed', 'snariou') and word-form inaccuracies ('no responsed'). The range of vocabulary is severely limited and inadequate for a standard academic task, struggling to convey precise measurements or trends, which aligns with a Band 4.5 or 5.0 descriptor profile.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The response exhibits a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences are simple or attempt complex forms that result in severe grammatical errors, such as 'According to the graph that shown in the figure asked that visitore are increases after refurbishment.' There are persistent issues with subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, prepositions, and clause structuring. These frequent errors cause considerable difficulty for the reader and impede clear communication, fitting the Band 4 descriptors.
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