Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 11 · 2026-09-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
the information about the number of visitors to Ashdown museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished.The chart show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods has been illustrated by the assigned pie chart.
Overall, it is vivid from the mentioned pie chart , the maximum percentage of consequences of surveys of visitor satisfaction was in dissatisfied,whie minimum in no response.
As can be observed, the consequences of surveys of visitor satisfaction before refurbished in very satisfied was 15 for former and 30 for latter. However,the results of surveys of visitors dissatisfied was higher 40 rather than lower 10 in very dissatisfied.Besidethis,no response was decrease upto 5.
Additionally,the results of surveys of visitor satisfied after refurbished in very satisfied was 35,while 40 was in satisfied . Movingahead,the dissatisfied was 15.Movingfurther,the very dissatisfied and no response was similar upto 5.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0
The response attempts to summarise the data, but it suffers from severe misinterpretations of the visual information. The student confuses pie charts with survey data and misrepresents the visitor numbers and categories. For instance, the text claims that 'visitor satisfaction before refurbished in very satisfied was 15 for former and 30 for latter,' which misreads the structure of the charts. While the response attempts an overview ('the maximum percentage of consequences of surveys... was in dissatisfied'), the overall development is confused and inaccurate, failing to clearly report the main features such as the overall visitor numbers (74,000 rising to 92,000) or the clear shift towards higher satisfaction after the refurbishment. This performance aligns with Band 4.0 descriptors.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text is divided into paragraphs, attempting an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. However, the logical progression is weak and the overall arrangement is confusing. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or inaccurately, such as 'Besidethis,' 'Movingahead,' and 'Movingfurther,' which feel mechanical and inappropriate for academic writing. Referencing is frequently unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow which period or chart is being discussed. Paragraphing is present, but the internal cohesion and logical flow are significantly impaired, placing the response firmly at Band 4.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and often unnatural. Phrases like 'consequences of surveys' and 'maximum percentage of consequences' misuse common collocation and vocabulary. Other errors include spelling issues ('whie' instead of 'while', 'upto') and awkward phrasing like 'before refurbished' instead of 'before refurbishment'. While the student attempts some less common items, the misuse of vocabulary and frequent lexical errors strain the reader and impede clear communication. This corresponds to Band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of faulty simple and attempted complex structures. There are numerous grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ('the very dissatisfied and no response was similar') and incorrect prepositional or adverbial usage. Punctuation and spacing errors are also frequent (e.g., missing spaces after commas and periods). These errors are frequent and constantly distract the reader, occasionally distorting the intended meaning, which matches the Band 4.0 criteria.
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